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You went to the local hospital’s Emergency Department with with your young child who had severe stomach pain. You had to wait four hours before your daughter was treated by a doctor and, while you were waiting, you were constantly ignored by other staff. Writ a latter to registrants, complaining about the service you received.

You went to the local hospital’s Emergency Department with with your young child who had severe stomach pain. You had to wait four hours before your daughter was treated by a doctor and, while you were waiting, you were constantly ignored by other staff. Writ a latter to registrants, complaining about the service you received. 2b6VX
Dear Sir/Madam, I am john shah, I had experienced ignorance at your hospital “the child care” last week, and, I am writing this letter to make you aware about irresponsible staff members. Last week, my 10 year old daughter Rena had a severe stomach ache and I had ton straightforwardly rush to your infirmary’s emergency department. When I reached at the health care centre receptionist told me that Paediatrician MR. Den is operating other patient consequently I ought to wait for some time. I agreed with their instructions. Although, after one hour, I again inquired for Mr. Den to nursing staff on duty. But, no one was ready to be concerned about my situation. They again asked me to wait. On the other side, Rena’s pain was excruciating by and within few minutes she started whipping. At that moment, I was expecting a preliminary care by emergency ward’s staff. However, no one cared about this little girl. Moreover, mgr. den took whole 4 hours to complete surgery of other patient. Finally, we got a chance to meet him. His medicine worked like magic on Rena. Despite of this, I am not satisfied with nursing member’s manners. It would be better if you interest and guide your employees to improve their etiquettes. I hope, you may understand my suffering and I am looking forward to experience better service next time. Yours Faithfully, John shah
Dear Sir/Madam,

I am john shah, I had experienced ignorance at your hospital “the child care” last week, and, I am writing this letter to
make
you aware about irresponsible staff members.

Last week, my 10 year
old
daughter Rena had a severe stomach ache and I had ton
straightforwardly
rush to your infirmary’s emergency department.
When
I reached at the health care
centre
receptionist
told
me that
Paediatrician
MR. Den is operating other patient
consequently
I ought to wait for
some
time. I
agreed
with their instructions. Although, after one hour, I again inquired for Mr. Den to nursing staff on duty.
But
, no one was ready to
be concerned
about my situation. They again asked me to wait. On the other side, Rena’s pain was excruciating by and within few minutes she
started
whipping. At that moment, I was expecting a preliminary care by emergency ward’s staff.
However
, no one cared about this
little
girl.

Moreover
, mgr.
den
took whole 4 hours to complete surgery of other patient.
Finally
, we
got
a chance to
meet
him. His medicine worked like magic on Rena.
Despite of
this, I am not satisfied with nursing member’s manners. It would be better if you interest and guide your employees to
improve
their
etiquettes
.

I hope, you may understand my
suffering and
I am looking forward to experience better service
next
time.

Yours
Faithfully
,

John shah
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IELTS letter You went to the local hospital’s Emergency Department with with your young child who had severe stomach pain. You had to wait four hours before your daughter was treated by a doctor and, while you were waiting, you were constantly ignored by other staff. Writ a latter to registrants, complaining about the service you received.

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