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Writing Task 1:- You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You would like to buy some electrical goods at a shop in a nearby town. Write a letter to the shop and ask if they have the things you want or whether they will be able to order them. Ask what the prices are and how long they will be able to hold the goods for you. You should write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write your own address. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir,

Writing Task 1: - You would like to buy some electrical goods at a shop in a nearby town. Write a letter to the shop and ask if they have the things you want or whether they will be able to order them. Ask what the prices are and how long they will be able to hold the goods for you. You do NOT need to write your own address. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir, r8KyN
Dear Sir, I am writing this letter to inquire for availability of product who I am interested in at your shop. your shop is a very famous in my area for all the types of branded technological items like Phones, Fridges, Mixtures, Blenders and much more; however, I am looking for a silver colour health band of 2. 0 model, which is recently launch by Apple. People are demanding more for this, if you Rush out this running model, then I would be appreciated if you could arrange it for me with discounted prices. If you eligible to arrange it, then I am waiting for your response, and please let me know discounted price of it, likewise please mention to time duration to hold my gadget, so that I can make a plan to travel to collect it from your shop. I hope you fulfill my finding by replying positive and prompt response! Yours faithfully, Anushree Raval
Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter to inquire for availability of product who I
am interested
in at your shop.

This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
your
shop is a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
famous
in my area for all the types of branded technological items like Phones, Fridges, Mixtures, Blenders and much more;
however
, I am looking for a silver
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colour
health band of 2. 0 model, which is recently
Consider using a past participle here: "launched".
launch
by Apple.

This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
People
are demanding more for this, if you Rush out this running model, then I would
be appreciated
if you could arrange it for me with discounted prices.

If you eligible to arrange it, then I am waiting for your response, and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
please
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
let
me know discounted price of it,
likewise
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
please
mention to time duration to hold my gadget,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that I can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
a plan to travel to collect it from your shop.

I hope you fulfill my finding by replying
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
and prompt response!

Yours
faithfully
,

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Anushree
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Raval
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IELTS letter Writing Task 1: - You would like to buy some electrical goods at a shop in a nearby town. Write a letter to the shop and ask if they have the things you want or whether they will be able to order them. Ask what the prices are and how long they will be able to hold the goods for you. You do NOT need to write your own address. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir,

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  American English
8 paragraphs
156 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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