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You have just returned home after living with a family in an English-speaking country for six months. You now realise that you left a small bag of personal possessions in your room. Write to the family describing the things you left behind. Ask them to send some or all of them to you. Offer to cover the costs.

You have just returned home after living with a family in an English-speaking country for six months. You now realise that you left a small bag of personal possessions in your room. Write to the family describing the things you left behind. Ask them to send some or all of them to you. Offer to cover the costs. MMBRQ
Dear Mr. Johnson I am an exchange student who were living in your house for six months. It was a really great experience for me. You were so nice and I was enjoy it so much. I have just arrived in Thailand. Unfortunately, I realized that I had left my bag in the bedroom. I was so hurry on that day and the bag was under my bed, I forgot to check it before I left. It is a small black leather with the zip on top and a small pocket at the front. Inside the bag, it has English books, diary, pictures, polaroid camera, a pink pen with my name on it and a charger. As you can see, all the stuff in the bag are really important for me. Would it be possible for you to send it back to me by airmail? All the cost will be paid by me. Thanking you in advance for your help. I am look forward to hearing from you. Yours sincere
Dear Mr. Johnson

I am an exchange student who were living in your
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for six months. It was a
really
great experience for me. You were
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so
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nice and
I was
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enjoy
it
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so
much. I have
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just
arrived in Thailand. Unfortunately, I realized that I had
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left
my
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bag
in the bedroom.

I was
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so
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hurry
on that day and the
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bag
was under my bed, I forgot to
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check
it
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before
I
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left
. It is a
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small
black leather with the zip on top and a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
small
pocket at the front. Inside the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bag
, it has English books, diary, pictures,
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polaroid
camera, a pink pen with my name on it and a charger. As you can
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see
, all the stuff in the
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bag
are
really
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important
for me.

Would it be possible for you to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
send
it back to me by airmail? All the cost will
be paid
by me. Thanking you in advance for your
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help
. I am look forward to hearing from you.

Yours sincere
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IELTS letter You have just returned home after living with a family in an English-speaking country for six months. You now realise that you left a small bag of personal possessions in your room. Write to the family describing the things you left behind. Ask them to send some or all of them to you. Offer to cover the costs.

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6.0
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