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You went to appear for an interview to another city by train.the train departed late from the station and you could not reach in time

You went to appear for an interview to another city by train. the train departed late from the station and you could not reach in time qRJ6p
My name is chetna mangrola. I am regular passenger of Mumbai train. I am writing this latter to complain about the train departed late at local railway station. I was going to Mumbai to surat for my last stage of interview. My departed time was 9am and arrived time was 2pm however trains departed time was 9. 10am but unfortunately, train departed late around 3 hours owing to some dispute of railway staff and the railway management. However staff went to an immediate strike around 4hours. owing to this, i was late by seven hours when i reached surat. As a result, i lost a opportunity to well known company. Due to went late they informed me that you lost your job. I apologize him and request to them gave me a next chance to prove my ability and talent. but they were not accepted my apology. I feel very stressed about lost my opportunity to dream company and also i was angry to railway staff. I am sending a copy of this latter to railway officers and local newspaper. Your faithfully, Chetna mangrola
My name is
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chetna
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mangrola
. I
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passenger of Mumbai
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. I am writing this latter to complain about the
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I
was going to Mumbai to
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surat
for my last stage of interview. My
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departed
time was 9am and arrived time was 2pm
however
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trains
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departed
time was 9. 10am
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unfortunately,
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train
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departed
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late
around 3 hours owing to
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some
dispute of
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railway
staff and the
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management.
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staff went to an immediate strike around 4hours.
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owing
to this,
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i
was
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late
by seven hours when
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i
reached
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surat
.
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,
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i
lost
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a
opportunity to well known
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company
. Due to went
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late
they informed me that you lost your job. I apologize him and request to them gave me a
next
chance to prove my ability and talent.
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but
they were not
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accepted
my apology. I feel
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about lost my opportunity to dream
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and
also
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i
was angry to
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staff. I am sending a copy of this latter to
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officers and local newspaper.
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Your
faithfully
,
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Chetna
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mangrola

IELTS letter You went to appear for an interview to another city by train. the train departed late from the station and you could not reach in time

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