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write a letter to a hospital for unpAID JOB

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing in connection with the advertisement in the green newspaper about voluntary work in your hospital. I am, therefore, enclosing my resume for your consideration. As my resume indicates, I have a very strong background in psychology clinic. I am studying psychology in Harvard university and it is essential for students to have contact with patients that need therapy. It is part of my education course. My present job is in a private clinic that is unpaid job too but working there is not convenient for me because of two reasons, one of them is long distance from my house and the other one is the number of patients are limited. I can be effective even in different parts of hospital, for instance, talking and preparing patients for surgery also makes calm and help who has mental problems. So that I will be able start my job at the first of the June. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Marziye sarbandi
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing in connection with the advertisement in the green newspaper about voluntary work in your hospital. I am,
therefore
, enclosing my resume for your consideration.

As my resume indicates, I have a
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very
strong background in psychology clinic. I am studying psychology in
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Harvard university
and it is essential for students to have contact with patients that need therapy. It is part of my education course.

My present job is in a private clinic
that is
unpaid job too
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but
working there is not convenient for me
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because
of two reasons, one of them is long distance from my
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house
and the other one is the number of patients
are limited
. I can be effective even in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
parts of hospital,
for instance
, talking and preparing patients for surgery
also
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
makes
calm and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
who has mental problems.
“So that” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
So that
I will be able
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
my job at the
first
of the June.

I look forward to hearing from you.

Yours
faithfully
,

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sarbandi
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IELTS letter write a letter to a hospital for unpAID JOB

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
169 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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