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You want to stay a two week hoiday in your friend's region. Write a letter asking for informatio and advice

You want to stay a two week hoiday in your friend's region. Write a letter asking for informatio and advice ENY2B
Dear Adriatic, I am writing to ask if you could help me with spending my two week holiday in your region. I am interested in your place so much. They say, this place is so quiet and it has wonderful view. Therefore, I decided to spend my vocation there. Could you give me some information where could I stay and how to get to there? I hope, there are many sightseeing places and it would be satisfy me. The most essential to me is to see ancient buildings that I had heard before. I want to take photos more adorable and attractive places. Because it would be important source for my research about historical buildings in our country. Could you possible offer your advise to reply my questions? What is the weather in this area? What kind of clothes could I take? Clearly, I do not know what things have to take too. I need your advice. It would be great help if you write me as soon as possible. I look forward to receiving your advice. Yours sincerely, Mina RAY
Dear Adriatic, I am writing to ask if you could
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help
me with spending my
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two week
holiday in your region. I
am interested
in your
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place
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so
much. They say, this
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place
is
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so
quiet and it has wonderful view.
Therefore
, I decided to spend my vocation there. Could you give me
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some
information where could I stay and how to
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get
to there? I hope, there are
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many
sightseeing
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places
and it would be
Consider using the past participle "satisfied"?
satisfy
me. The most essential to me is to
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see
ancient buildings that I had heard
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before
. I want to take photos more adorable and attractive
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places
.
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Because
it would be
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important
source for my research about historical buildings in our country. Could you
The word "possible" is an adjective and doesn't fit in this context. Did you mean the adverb "possibly"?
possible
offer your
The word 'advise' is a verb. Did you mean "advice" (noun)?
advise
to reply my questions? What is the weather in this area? What kind of clothes could I take?
Clearly
, I do not know what things
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have to
take too. I need your advice. It would be great
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
if you write me as
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soon
as possible. I look forward to receiving your advice. Yours
sincerely
,
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Mina
Please add a punctuation mark at the end of paragraph
RAY

IELTS letter You want to stay a two week hoiday in your friend's region. Write a letter asking for informatio and advice

Letter
  American English
1 paragraphs
180 words
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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