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You want to go to Winston University to do a degree in history.

You want to go to Winston University to do a degree in history. p5JbL

Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing to apply for a place on the History course which commences this September at Winston University. I am 27 years old and I have completed a Bachelorʼs degree in history at Cambridge University which I recieved my first class honours. Prior to this I was a pupil at specialized boarding school called Aristocrats in London, where I obtained 9 GCSEs and three A levels in Archaeology, Geography and Latin. Since the completion of my BA I have spent two years working as an independent researcher in the government volunteer club called Herodot and as a teacher at a comprehensive school in London. During this period I carried out researcher into the cultural life of the Asian people under control of Professor Charles Clarke. This work was extremely enjoyable and I am now anxious to specialized by gaining further qualifications before embarking on my chosen career in this field. I enclose a detailed curriculum vitae in the hope that you will consider my application for entry. I look forward to receiving your response in the near future. Yours faithfully, Jill Holland

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Bachelorʼs
 degree in history at Cambridge University which I Possible spelling mistake found.receivedrelieved
recieved
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honours
. Prior to this I was a pupil at specialized boarding school called Aristocrats in London, where I obtained 9 Possible spelling mistake found.GasesGCS EsGCSE
GCSEs
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A levels
 in Archaeology, Geography and Latin. Since the completion of my BA I have spent two years working as an independent researcher in the This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :national authoritypublic authority
government
 volunteer club called Possible spelling mistake found.Hero dot
Herodot
 and as a teacher at a comprehensive school in London. During this period I carried out researcher into the cultural life of the Asian This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
 under control of Professor Charles Clarke. This work was extremely
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enjoyable and
 I am This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :nowadays
now
 anxious to specialized by gaining further
 qualifications This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:previouslyprior to
before
 embarking on my chosen career in this field. I enclose a detailed curriculum vitae in the hope that you will consider my application for entry. I look forward to receiving your response in the near future. Yours faithfully
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