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You want to arrange a conference at the Hotel Excel. Write an email to the manager

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Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing to ask for information about a conference at the Hotel Excel. We looking for place with at least one large room and room can accommodate 100 people. Could you tell me know if you fast wi-fi in large room? We would like use photopying services and projector. We would like book 70 room for all delegate for one night. We would like all delegate eat dinner two day. Could you tell me know the parking is big and free? Because many delegate is far hotel. And finaly, the conference last for two day and one night, so could you tell me what your best price for this is? I looking forward to hearing from you. Best Regard,
Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing to
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ask for
information about a conference at the Hotel Excel.
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We looking
for place with at least one large
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room
and
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room
can accommodate 100
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people
. Could you
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tell
me know if you
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fast
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wi-fi
in large
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room
? We would like
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use
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photopying
services and projector. We would like book 70
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room
for all delegate for one night.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
We
would like all delegate eat dinner two day. Could you
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tell
me know the parking is
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big
and free?
“Because” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Because
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many delegate
is far hotel. And
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finaly
, the conference last for two day and one night,
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so
could you
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tell
me what your best price for this is?

Did you mean "I'm looking", "I am looking", or "I was looking"?
I looking
forward to hearing from you.

A determiner is probably missing here: "the Best".
Best
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Regard
,
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IELTS letter You want to arrange a conference at the Hotel Excel. Write an email to the manager

Letter
  American English
4 paragraphs
122 words
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text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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