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You want to arrange a conference at the Hotel Excel. Write an email to the manager: • explaining the reason for your email. • giving information about the number of people attending and the rooms you want. • asking for information about price.

You want to arrange a conference at the Hotel Excel. Write an email to the manager: • explaining the reason for your email. • giving information about the number of people attending and the rooms you want. • asking for information about price. NMmEm
Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing to ask for information about a conference at the Hotel Excel. We looking for place with at least one large room and room can accommodate 100 people. Could you tell me know if you fast wi-fi in large room? We would like use photopying services and projector. We would like book 70 room for all delegate for one night. We would like all delegate eat dinner two day. Could you tell me know the parking is big and free? Because many delegate is far hotel. And finaly, the conference last for two day and one night, so could you tell me what your best price for this is? I looking forward to hearing from you. Best Regard,
Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing to
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ask for
information about a conference at the Hotel Excel.
Did you mean "We're looking", "We are looking", or "We were looking"?
We looking
for place with at least one large
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room
and
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room
can accommodate 100
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people
. Could you
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tell
me know if you
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fast
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wi-fi
in large
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room
? We would like
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use
Possible spelling mistake found.
photopying
services and projector. We would like book 70
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
room
for all delegate for one night.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
We
would like all delegate eat dinner two day. Could you
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
tell
me know the parking is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
big
and free?
“Because” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Because
Possible agreement error. The noun delegate seems to be countable; consider using: "many delegates".
many delegate
is far hotel. And
Possible spelling mistake found.
finaly
, the conference last for two day and one night,
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so
could you
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tell
me what your best price for this is?

Did you mean "I'm looking", "I am looking", or "I was looking"?
I looking
forward to hearing from you.

A determiner is probably missing here: "the Best".
Best
Did you mean "Regards"?
Regard
,

IELTS letter You want to arrange a conference at the Hotel Excel. Write an email to the manager: • explaining the reason for your email. • giving information about the number of people attending and the rooms you want. • asking for information about price.

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  American English
4 paragraphs
122 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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4.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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