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You share your room with another student in the college hostel. You find it very difficult to study there because he or she always has parties and friends visiting. Write a letter to the hostel warden complaining about your displeasure with the room mate.

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to let you know about my immediate living condition. I am living in your college rooms. I have some serious issues with my roommate. Firstly, before my present roommate, I was living with another housemate which was quiet and decent in nature while compare to current housemate. He is making himself as intolerable for me. He used to waking up almost whole night and plays loud music every time. Resulting that, I am not able to sleep well in night. Furthermore, due to this I am not able to concentrate on my work and studies. Because of his above mentioned bad habits I am getting nervures and cannot accomplish my desired goals for education and also losing my confidence. Moreover, I am not getting high score in my class exams. Now, you are aware from my physical state. You are requested to give me a favor by changing his room or shift me from his room to another room with a good and ample partner. Please considerate my request and take prompt appropriate initiate. Looking forward to your reply! Your’s sincerely, Dilip Kalal.
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to
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you know about my immediate living condition. I am living in your college
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I
have
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serious issues with my roommate.

Firstly
,
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before
my present roommate, I was living with another housemate which was quiet and decent in nature while compare to
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current
housemate. He is making himself as intolerable for me. He
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used
to waking up almost whole night and plays loud music every time. Resulting that, I am not able to sleep well in night.

Furthermore
, due to this I am not able to concentrate on my work and studies.
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Because
of his above mentioned
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bad
habits I am getting
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nervures
and cannot accomplish my desired goals for education and
also
losing my confidence.
Moreover
, I am not getting high score in my
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class
exams.

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Now
, you are aware from my physical state. You
are requested
to give me a favor by changing his
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room
or shift me from his
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room
to another
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room
with a
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good
and ample partner.

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Please
considerate my request and take prompt appropriate initiate. Looking forward to your reply!

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Your’s
sincerely
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Dilip
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Kalal
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IELTS letter You share your room with another student in the college hostel. You find it very difficult to study there because he or she always has parties and friends visiting. Write a letter to the hostel warden complaining about your displeasure with the room mate.

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  American English
8 paragraphs
190 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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