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You saw a job vacancy on a newspper, write a letter applying for the job

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Dear sir, I am writing to apply for the position of a secretary which was advertised in the Sun Newspaper dated 18th of November. I hold a B. Sc in Mass communication and also currently running a masters degree in Organizational Communications in the university of Lagos. I have a wealth of experience in secretarial duties as I have worked in two different multinational companies in Lagos and in London. I sure I will be able to take on any secretarial duties perfectly. Enclosed in this letter is a detailed copy of curriculum vitae for your perusal. Thank you in anticipation and I hope to hear from soon. Yours Sincerely, Mercy Ikpi

Dear sir, I am writing to apply for the position of a secretary which was advertised
 in the Sun Newspaper dated 18th of November. I hold a Consider using a more common abbreviation of this university degree.B.Sc.
B. Sc
 in Mass communication and also
currently
 running a For an academic degree, use "master’s".master’s
masters
 degree in Organizational Communications in the university of Lagos. I have a wealth of experience in secretarial duties as I have worked in two This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:various
different
 multinational This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :enterprisescorporations
companies
 in Lagos and in London. Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
 sure I will be able to take on any secretarial duties perfectly
. Enclosed in this letter is a detailed copy of curriculum vitae for your perusal. Thank you in anticipation and I hope to hear from This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:in the near future
soon
. Yours Sincerely
, Mercy Please add a punctuation mark at the end of paragraphIkpi.Ikpi!Ikpi?Ikpi:Ikpi,Ikpi;
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IELTS letter You saw a job vacancy on a newspper, write a letter applying for the job

Letter

American English

1 paragraphs

111 words

This writing has been penalized,
text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1

4.0

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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One main idea per paragraph
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Include an introduction and conclusion
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Support main points with an explanation and then an example
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Vary your linking phrases using synonyms

Lexical Resource: 6.5

Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes

Grammatical Range: 6.5

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
Check your writing for errors

Task Achievement: 5.0

Answer all parts of the question
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Present relevant ideas
Fully explain these ideas
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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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