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You saw a brochure for a one-week walking tour in the mountains. You're very interested in taking part, but you're not very fit and are worried you wouldn't be able to keep up. Write to the tour operator. In your letter: • Explain why you're interested in the tour. • Ask for information about dates and prices. • Express your concerns about your fitness level.

You saw a brochure for a one-week walking tour in the mountains. You're very interested in taking part, but you're not very fit and are worried you wouldn't be able to keep up. Write to the tour operator. In your letter: • Explain why you're interested in the tour. • Ask for information about dates and prices. • Express your concerns about your fitness level. aawY
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing this letter to express my interest in your Yosemite National Park hiking tour which I found in a brochure during our visit at the National Travel Fair in San Francisco last Saturday. After having spent a substantial amount of time on researching it, I realize this could be the one of the most memorable tours in my life thanks to the magnificent landscape and wide variety of flora and fauna. However, I also have a few concerns that need to be clarified. Although the brochure demonstrated the information thoroughly, I found there was lack of dates and prices. It would be very kind of you to provide the dates and prices since the prices may fluctuate due to seasonality. Besides, the length of the hike is also missing in the brochure. I currently weigh more than 200lbs so my body is not suitable for strenuous hiking activities, especially for a long hike on steep terrain. Thus, knowing the difficulty level of the hike is essential for me before actually booking the tour. It would be very kind of you to provide these information as soon as possible. I am seriously planning to participate in the tour by the end of this month if it is suitable for my health condition. I am looking forward to your potentially positive feedback. Thank you for your time and consideration. Sincerely yours
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing this letter to express my interest in your Yosemite National Park hiking

tour which I found in a brochure during our visit at the National Travel
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Fair
in San

Francisco last Saturday.
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After
having spent a substantial amount of time
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on


researching it, I realize this could be the one of the most memorable tours in my life

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thanks
to the magnificent landscape and wide variety of flora and fauna.
However
, I

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also
have a few concerns that need to
be clarified
.

Although the brochure demonstrated the information
thoroughly
, I found there was

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lack
of dates and prices. It would be
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very
kind of you to provide the dates and
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prices


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since
the prices may fluctuate due to seasonality.
Besides
, the length of the hike is

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also
missing in the brochure. I
currently
weigh more than 200lbs
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so
my body is
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not


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suitable
for strenuous hiking activities,
especially
for a long hike on steep terrain.

Thus
, knowing the difficulty level of the hike is essential for me
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before
actually

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booking
the tour.

It would be
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very
kind of you to provide
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these information
as
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soon
as possible. I
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am


seriously
planning to participate in the tour by the
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end
of this month if it is suitable for

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my
health
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condition
. I am looking forward to your
potentially
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positive
feedback. Thank

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you
for your time and consideration.

Sincerely
yours
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IELTS letter You saw a brochure for a one-week walking tour in the mountains. You're very interested in taking part, but you're not very fit and are worried you wouldn't be able to keep up. Write to the tour operator. In your letter: • Explain why you're interested in the tour. • Ask for information about dates and prices. • Express your concerns about your fitness level.

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