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You recently went to a public event (for example an exhibition, festival, or show) that you think your friend would enjoy. Write a letter to friend. In your letter tell your friend what the event was explain why you think your friend would like the event invite them to come to the event with you

People hold different views about how our tax money should be spent. While I agree that medical care is a field that requires huge investments, I believe that the government should also allocate the money for other priorities, such as education and transport. On the one hand, a certain amount of tax money has to go to healthcare services. Today, a number of particular diseases are on the rise in terms of popularity, and it would be costly to supply vaccines, medicines, or treatments. For example, a large proportion of the population is now suffering from respiratory diseases or lung cancer due to exhaust fumes from vehicles and gas emissions from industrial factories. The remedies for those patients and the treatment facilities are often expensive, and the hospitals may find themselves in the struggle with financial problems without assistance from the tax system. On the other hand, healthcare is not the only industry that needs money to be kept running. Take education as an example. The quality of the schooling system is proportional to the competence of the future workforce. Therefore, a country can benefit from such skillful human resources in the long-term if they invest the tax budget to build schools, provide lecturers with training courses, or hire native speakers to teach a foreign language. Moreover, the government should also spend money on solving transport problems. Traffic congestion is a global issue these days, and we can only handle the scenario if new highways are opened, and narrow public roads are expanded. In conclusion, I believe that the government should use tax-payers’ money to improve not only the healthcare services, but also the education and transportation system.
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expensive, and the hospitals may find themselves in the struggle with financial problems without assistance from the
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industry that needs
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running. Take education as an example. The quality of the schooling system is proportional to the competence of the future workforce.
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budget to build schools, provide lecturers with training courses, or hire native speakers to teach a foreign language.
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on solving transport problems. Traffic congestion is a global issue these days, and we can
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IELTS letter You recently went to a public event (for example an exhibition, festival, or show) that you think your friend would enjoy. Write a letter to friend. In your letter tell your friend what the event was explain why you think your friend would like the event invite them to come to the event with you

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3 paragraphs
278 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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