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You recently went to a public event (for example an exhibition, festival, or show) that you think your friend would enjoy. Write a letter to friend. In your letter tell your friend what the event was explain why you think your friend would like the event invite them to come to the event with you

Hi Andron, I hope this letter will find you well. It has been long to see you. I am glad to tell you that an electronic game exhibition will be held in the Redwood next month. I am sure that you will like it. If you are available then, I hope you can come. The exhibition attracts more than fifty game producers who will release most up-to-date games raging from mini-cartoon leisure games to large-scale network games. What's more exciting, According to sales brochures, the top five game players in the world will be invited to perform and show their skills. I am sure that thousands of fans like you will throng into the exhibition center. So don't miss it. The exhibition will be held on 12th April at sports center located near South station. I wonder if you could come two days in advance so we can travel around and meet some old friends here. Please call me and I will pick you up. I will waiting for your reply. Best regards. David.
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Andron
,

I hope this letter will find you well. It has been long to
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see
you. I am glad to
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tell
you that an electronic game exhibition will
be held
in the Redwood
next
month. I am sure that you will like it. If you are available then, I hope you can
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come
.

The exhibition attracts more than fifty game producers who will release most up-to-date
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games
raging from mini-cartoon leisure
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
games
to large-scale network
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
games
. What's more exciting, According to sales brochures, the top five game players in the world will
be invited
to perform and
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show
their
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skills
. I am sure that thousands of fans like you will throng into the exhibition center.
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So
don't miss it.

The exhibition will
be held
on 12th April at sports center located near South station. I wonder if you could
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
two days in advance
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so
we can travel around and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
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some
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old
friends here.
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Please
call me and I will pick you up.

I will
The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: "wait"
waiting
for your reply.

Best regards.

David.

IELTS letter You recently went to a public event (for example an exhibition, festival, or show) that you think your friend would enjoy. Write a letter to friend. In your letter tell your friend what the event was explain why you think your friend would like the event invite them to come to the event with you

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  American English
7 paragraphs
174 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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