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You recently took a part-time job working for a local company. After a few weeks, you realised there were some problems with the job. Write a letter to the manager of the company. In your letter explain why you took the job describe the problems that you experienced suggest what could be done about them

Dear Sir, First of all, I would like to take this opportunity to thank you for accepting me as a part-time employee with your drafting company. Rest assured that I would do my best as drafter and meet all the deadlines given to me. This will help a lot with my financial needs especially with my tuition fee. This will help to boost my credentials after I have finished with my engineering degree. I would also like to take this opportunity to share some of the findings or problems I have encountered recently with the drawing tools and office set-up. I found out that some of the drawing table was too old which may need refurbishment or replacement. The surface was not that smooth as it was used to be which cause errors while doing drafting works. The lighting in the office needs also to be replaced especially the one in the corners where we need to have a consistent light even in the day time. This two suggestion I have provided will surely minimize our efficiency and drawing errors. Yours truly, Francis Dan

Dear Sir,

Often, this adverbial phrase is redundant. Consider using “first”.First
First of all
, I would like to take this opportunity to thank you for accepting me as a part-time employee with your drafting This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :enterprisecorporation
company
. Rest assured that I would do my best as drafter and This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :attain
meet
 all the deadlines This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :accorded
given
 to me. This will This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :assistassistance
help
 a lot with my financial You use this word too often, consider replacing it withuserightwishcommitmentdemandobligation
needs
especially
 with my tuition fee. This will This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :assistassistance
help
 to boost my credentials after I have finished with my engineering degree.

I would also
 like to take this opportunity to share If the text is a generality, ‘of the’ is not necessary.some
some of the
 findings or problems I have encountered recently with the drawing tools and office set-up. I found out that If the text is a generality, ‘of the’ is not necessary.some
some of the
 drawing table was too This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:ancientagedmature
old
 which may You use this word too often, consider replacing it withuserightwishcommitmentdemandobligation
need
 refurbishment or replacement. The surface was not that smooth as it was This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exploited
used
 to be which cause errors while doing drafting works. The lighting in the office You use this word too often, consider replacing it withuserightwishcommitmentdemandobligation
needs
also
 to be replaced
especially
 the one in the corners where we You use this word too often, consider replacing it withuserightwishcommitmentdemandobligation
need
 to have a consistent light even in the day time.

This two suggestion I have provided will surely
 minimize our efficiency and drawing errors.

Yours truly
,

Francis Dan