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you recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or to try get a job

Hi Abhishek, I am writing this letter in response to the advice you had ask whether to go to college or try get a job. I would recommend to go for a job Firstly, let me tell you why you wouldn’t like the college. In today’s time the education that is being provided is not useful for work environment or future references. Though I have already studied the course that you want to pursue from the top university and I learnt that there were a lot of things which were not even useful to what I studied. Secondly, the reason why I want you to go for a job is because that will give you exposure, boost your confidence as you would be dealing with real life problems. While trying to solve such problems, you will be able to learn a lot from it. Also, by earning it will help you to become independent. One another benefit of job is, the early you start working the faster it will show the level of maturity in your life. On this note, I would also like to recommend some of the jobs that are in demand in the current market. As you have done your bachelors in Computer Science, it would be great for you to get into coding and development. A lot of companies are looking for coders with different skill set. In conclusion, I would like to suggest you to go for a job instead of college. I hope this helps. All the best. Yours lovingly, Prayas Ahuja

Hi Abhishek,

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recommend to go
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 market. As you have done your bachelors in Computer Science, it would be great for you to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquire
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 into coding and development. This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a plethora ofa number ofnumerous
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companies
 are looking for coders with This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:various
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 set.

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, I would like to suggest you to go for a You use this word too often, consider replacing it withtaskappointmentofficebusinesscareerassignment
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instead
 of college.

I hope this This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :assists
helps
. All the best.

Yours lovingly
,

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Prayas
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Ahuja