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You recently read an article in the newspaper about someone you know personally. You found some information is wrong. Write a letter to the editor to inform him about it. In your letter: what the article is about what the error is what you expect the editor to do

You recently read an article in the newspaper about someone you know personally. You found some information is wrong. Write a letter to the editor to inform him about it. In your letter: what the article is about what the error is what you expect the editor to do 87wm
Dear Sir or Madam, Three days ago I read an article in your newspaper, the Daily Times, about a local hero who saved seven children from an impending fatal accident almost five years ago. He is also a revered doctor and a beloved father and a husband. I am personally known to him as a former college and would like to point out some of the inaccurate information that the article included about him. In relation to the specifics of the article, it was published in the Daily Times on the local news section on 18th November and it focused on how valiant Mr Alfred’s act was to risk his own life in order to save others. This was a great read and I must commend the article. However, the mention of his serving in the Air Force in 2001 is incorrect. He had been, instead, in the Navy and served as a doctor, not a soldier. Moreover, he does not work for the Turnberry Hospital anymore, despite the claim. He is now retired and enjoys his time with his family. As a clarification, and because I really appreciate your effort to highlight his noble acts, I would like someone from your newspaper to contact him and apologise for the mistakes and then publish a correction regarding the article. Thank you for giving the matter your attention and I hope to hear your reply soon. Yours faithfully, David Hanson
Dear Sir or Madam,

Three days ago I read an
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in your newspaper, the Daily Times, about a local hero who saved seven children from an impending fatal accident almost five years ago. He is
also
a revered doctor and a beloved father and a husband. I am
personally
known to him as a former college and would like to point out
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some of the
inaccurate information that the
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article
included about him.

In relation to the specifics of the
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article
, it
was published
in the Daily Times on the local news section on 18th November and it focused on how valiant Mr Alfred’s act was to
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risk
his
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own
life in order to save others. This was a great read and I
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must
commend the
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article
.
However
, the mention of his serving in the Air Force in 2001 is incorrect. He had been,
instead
, in the Navy and served as a doctor, not a soldier.
Moreover
, he does not work for the
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Turnberry
Hospital anymore, despite the claim. He is
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now
retired and enjoys his time with his family.

As a clarification, and
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because
I
really
appreciate your effort to highlight his noble acts, I would like someone from your newspaper to contact him and
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apologise
for the mistakes and then publish a correction regarding the article.

Thank you for giving the matter your attention and I hope to hear your reply
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soon
.

Yours
faithfully
,

David Hanson

IELTS letter You recently read an article in the newspaper about someone you know personally. You found some information is wrong. Write a letter to the editor to inform him about it. In your letter: what the article is about what the error is what you expect the editor to do

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7 paragraphs
238 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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