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you have a full-time job and are also doing a part-time evening course. you now find that you cannot continue the course. write a letter to your tutor. in your letter, - describe the situation, - explain why you cannot continue at this time, -say what action you woild like to take. write at least 150 words.

you have a full-time job and are also doing a part-time evening course. you now find that you cannot continue the course. write a letter to your tutor. in your letter, - describe the situation, - explain why you cannot continue at this time, -say what action you woild like to take. ryN2
Dear Mr Doe I am Sam Chan, one of the student in your evening course. I am writing to request for deferring the evening course. In a normal case, I used to be able to work my full-time job completely together with a part-time evening course. However, due to the epidemic, many companies need to lay off people in order to keep the company alive. My company is one of them. Many of my co-workers had been fired, consequently, my workload is being increased dramatically. I am afraid I will not have enough time to complete the course at this moment. As a result, I hope you will do me a favour that you permit me to defer my course for a least one semester, as I really have a great interest in your course. Hope my past record will be token into account when you are making the decision. I look forward to your reply soon. Yours sincerely Sam Chan
Dear Mr Doe

I am Sam Chan, one of the student in your evening
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
. I am writing to request for deferring the evening course.

In a normal case, I
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used
to be able to work my full-time job completely together with a part-time evening
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
.
However
, due to the epidemic,
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many
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companies
need to lay off
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people
in order to
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keep
the
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company
alive. My
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company
is one of them.
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Many
of my co-workers had
been fired
,
consequently
, my workload is
being increased
dramatically
. I am afraid I will not have
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enough
time to complete the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
at this moment.

As a result
, I hope you will do me a
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favour
that you permit me to defer my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
for
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a
least one semester, as I
really
have a great interest in your course.

Hope my past record will be token into account when you are making the decision. I look forward to your reply
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
.

Yours
sincerely


Sam Chan

IELTS letter you have a full-time job and are also doing a part-time evening course. you now find that you cannot continue the course. write a letter to your tutor. in your letter, - describe the situation, - explain why you cannot continue at this time, -say what action you woild like to take.

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  American English
6 paragraphs
160 words
6.0
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