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You recently ordered a small item online but when it arrived it was unusable. Write a letter to the company that sold you the item. In the letter:  give details about the order you made - date of purchase, device name, payment mode, explain what was wrong with the item. tell the company what you want them to do about it

You recently ordered a small item online but when it arrived it was unusable. Write a letter to the company that sold you the item. In the letter:  give details about the order you made - date of purchase, device name, payment mode, explain what was wrong with the item. tell the company what you want them to do about it 27OA
Dear Sir or Madam, I purchased a Samsung mobile phone last week from your e commerce website and I am writing to express my dissatisfaction towards the device as it is not in a working condition. The booking was done, on 15th February, 2021. It was the latest version of Note series that is Samsung Galaxy Note 5 and I made order for white in colour. Payment was done through my CITI bank credit card. As promised, I was delivered the item on 18th Afternoon. I was elated to see my new phone. I took a picture to upload on social media site. when I activated, everything went smoothly. However, suddenly after a playing a video there was no audio. This has caused me a lot of inconvenience as I had made the purchase for my holiday vacation to Europe. I request you to collect the device and refund the money as I have already placed a request on your website. Yours Faithfully, Deepak Waja
Dear Sir or Madam,

I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
purchased
a Samsung mobile phone last week from your
This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
e commerce
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
website and
I am writing to express my dissatisfaction towards the device as it is not in a working condition.

The booking
was done
, on 15th
When specifying a month and year, the comma is unnecessary: "February 2021".
February, 2021
. It was the latest version of Note series
that is
Samsung Galaxy Note 5 and I made order for
A more concise phrase may lose no meaning and sound more powerful.
white in colour
. Payment
was done
through my
Possible spelling mistake found.
CITI
bank credit card.

As promised, I
was delivered
the item on 18th Afternoon. I
was elated
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
my new phone. I took a picture to upload on social media site.
This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
when
I activated, everything went
smoothly
.
However
,
suddenly
after a playing a video there was no audio.

This has caused me
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
a lot of
inconvenience as I had made the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
purchase
for my holiday vacation to Europe. I request you to collect the device and refund the money as I have already placed a request on your website.

Yours
Faithfully
,

Deepak
Possible spelling mistake found.
Waja

IELTS letter You recently ordered a small item online but when it arrived it was unusable. Write a letter to the company that sold you the item. In the letter:  give details about the order you made - date of purchase, device name, payment mode, explain what was wrong with the item. tell the company what you want them to do about it

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  American English
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164 words
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