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You recently moved to a new apartment. Write to your friend and say

You recently moved to a new apartment. Write to your friend and say ELp8q
Dear Sarah, Hope this letter finds you in radiant health and the best of spirits. The good news is that I got a promotion and so I have moved from Phagwara to Chandigarh. You know very well that I have been working with the HDFC Bank for the last five years. My promotion was long overdue. Last month I got my promotion and along with that I also got a transfer to the head office at Chandigarh. Chandigarh is a very nice and beautiful city. In fact it is the most well planned city of Punjab. I got my accommodation through the bank in sector 35. I moved in two weeks ago. It is a beautiful apartment. There are two bedrooms, a hall and a kitchen. The shopping center is very near. By bank is also in this sector only. So, I just walk there. I don't need to take out my car. Why don't you come over for a few days. I am sure you will like it here. We would visit all these places together and also share some nostalgic memories of our college years. Hoping to see you soon! Yours lovingly, Kiran
Dear Sarah,

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news is that I
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promotion and
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Phagwara
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well that I have been working with the HDFC Bank for the last five years. My promotion was long overdue. Last month I
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got
my promotion and along with that I
also
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got
a transfer to the head office at Chandigarh.

Chandigarh is a
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very
nice and
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beautiful
city. In
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is the most well planned city of Punjab. I
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got
my accommodation through the bank in sector 35. I
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moved
in two weeks ago. It is a
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beautiful
apartment. There are two bedrooms, a hall and a kitchen. The shopping center is
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very
near. By bank is
also
in this sector
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only
.
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So
, I
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just
walk there. I don't need to take out my car.

Why don't you
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come
over for a few days. I am sure you will like it here. We would visit all these places together and
also
share
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some
nostalgic memories of our college years.

Hoping to
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see
you
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soon
!

Yours
lovingly
,

Kiran
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IELTS letter You recently moved to a new apartment. Write to your friend and say

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
194 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 5.5
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