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You recently had your computer fixed at a local computer store, however, you are not please with the service you received, write a letter to the store manager, . In the letter 1. Describe the situation 2. Explain why you are dissatisfied 3. say what you want the manager to do.

You recently had your computer fixed at a local computer store, however, you are not please with the service you received, write a letter to the store manager, . In the letter 1. Describe the situation 2. Explain why you are dissatisfied 3. say what you want the manager to do. 3PbX
Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing to express my dissatisfaction with the service which I had recently in your service center. I visited your service center with a few issues with my computer and I am not glad with the service which I had. To begin, I insisted on updating the Operating system from Windows 10 to Windows 11 and to install a graphic card to my computer. Usually, it takes only an hour to install the new software, but the technicians took more than two and a half hours to upgrade the computer, furthermore, there was a minute break in the monitor. In addition to that, he behaved rudely, when I had requested to know the reason for the time delay, and about the damage in the monitor. I felt extremely stressful throughout that day. I would be grateful if you provide an alternate monitor, and I owe an apology from the technicians. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully,
Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing to express my dissatisfaction with the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
service
which I had recently in your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
service
center. I visited your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
service
center with a few issues with my
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
computer and
I am not
The usual collocation for "glad" is "about" not "with". Did you mean "glad about"?
glad with
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
service
which I had.

To
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
begin
, I insisted on updating the Operating system from Windows 10 to Windows 11 and to install a graphic card to my computer.
Usually
, it takes
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
an hour to install the new software,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
the technicians took more than two and a half hours to upgrade the computer,
furthermore
, there was a minute break in the monitor.

In addition
to that, he behaved
rudely
, when I had requested to know the reason for the time delay, and about the damage in the monitor. I felt
extremely
stressful throughout that day. I would be grateful if you provide an alternate monitor, and I owe an apology from the technicians.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
look forward to hearing from you.

Yours
faithfully
,

IELTS letter You recently had your computer fixed at a local computer store, however, you are not please with the service you received, write a letter to the store manager, . In the letter 1. Describe the situation 2. Explain why you are dissatisfied 3. say what you want the manager to do.

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  American English
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162 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.5
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