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YOU RECENTLY DID A SHORT COOKERY COURSE. THE COOKERY SCHOOL HAS ASKED FOR YOUR FEEDBACK ON THIS COURSE. WRITE A LETTER TO THE COURSE DIRECTOR AT THE COOKERY SCHOOL. IN YOUR LETTER • DESCRIBE WHAT YOU ENJOYED ABOUT THE COURSE • SAY HOW MUCH COOKING YOU’VE DONE SINCE THE COURSE • SUGGEST ANOTHER COOKERY COURSE YOU’D LIKE THE SCHOOL TO OFFER

YOU RECENTLY DID A SHORT COOKERY COURSE. THE COOKERY SCHOOL HAS ASKED FOR YOUR FEEDBACK ON THIS COURSE. WRITE A LETTER TO THE COURSE DIRECTOR AT THE COOKERY SCHOOL. IN YOUR LETTER • DESCRIBE WHAT YOU ENJOYED ABOUT THE COURSE • SAY HOW MUCH COOKING YOU’VE DONE SINCE THE COURSE • SUGGEST ANOTHER COOKERY COURSE YOU’D LIKE THE SCHOOL TO OFFER QyoX
Dear Madam, I’m writing this letter in give my feedback for recent cookery course that your school has organised in last week. First of all I’m really fond of cooking & trying different dishes. Main thing what i liked most about your cookery course is that you’ve offered all different types of cuisines, but conduct one cuisine at a time. This will help us to better understand basics of cooking. After completing this course, I’d tried all recipes which you covered in session. Moreover, I also invited my cousins & friends to come over my place & try my dishes. You won’t believe they totally surprised by it & even some of them asked your number to join you. At last, I would like to request you to arrange ice cream making course, as summer is about to come so we’ll enjoy different types of ice creams at home only. Yours faithfully, Jahnvi Thakkar
Dear Madam,

I’m writing this letter in give my feedback for recent cookery
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
that your school has
Possible spelling mistake. 'organised' is British English.
organised
in last week.

This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".
First of all
I’m
really
fond of cooking & trying
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
dishes. Main thing what
Is this the personal pronoun "I"? It is spelled uppercase.
i
liked most about your cookery
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
is that you’ve offered all
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
types of cuisines,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
conduct one cuisine at a time. This will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
us to better understand basics of cooking.

After completing this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
, I’d tried all recipes which you covered in session.
Moreover
, I
also
invited my cousins & friends to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
over my place & try my dishes. You won’t believe they
totally
surprised by it & even
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
of them asked your number to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
join
you.

At last, I would like to request you to arrange ice cream making
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
, as summer is about to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
we’ll enjoy
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
types of ice creams at home
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
.

Yours
faithfully
,

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Jahnvi
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Thakkar

IELTS letter YOU RECENTLY DID A SHORT COOKERY COURSE. THE COOKERY SCHOOL HAS ASKED FOR YOUR FEEDBACK ON THIS COURSE. WRITE A LETTER TO THE COURSE DIRECTOR AT THE COOKERY SCHOOL. IN YOUR LETTER • DESCRIBE WHAT YOU ENJOYED ABOUT THE COURSE • SAY HOW MUCH COOKING YOU’VE DONE SINCE THE COURSE • SUGGEST ANOTHER COOKERY COURSE YOU’D LIKE THE SCHOOL TO OFFER

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