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You recently did a short cookery course. The cookery school has asked for your feedback on this course. v.2

You recently did a short cookery course. The cookery school has asked for your feedback on this course. v. 2
Dear Sir or Madam, Recently, I have taken a short cookery course at your renowned institute, and I am writing this letter to express how much happy I am about the course, which I attended about a month ago, in an effort to enhance my culinary arts skills. I must admit that even though the course was taught intensively for a good period of four weeks, I felt like the time had passed rather quickly since I enjoyed the course so much. By the way, the best thing about the course was that it comprehensively taught me about the arts of making some Italian and oriental desserts quickly and easily. Besides, I enjoyed learning about the tricks of chopping meats so nicely. Anyway, after finishing the cookery course, I used some of my cooking skills to prepare some delicious desserts for the birthday party of one of my close friends in addition to preparing some of my favourite dishes for my family. Before ending here, I would also like to request you to introduce a short course at your institute on preparing desserts by using different kinds of tropical fruits and vegetables. Thank you once again for conducting such a useful course. Yours faithfully, Andre Dmitry
Dear Sir or Madam,

Recently, I have taken a short cookery
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course
at your renowned institute, and I am writing this letter to express how much happy I am about the
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course
, which I attended about a month ago, in an effort to enhance my culinary arts
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skills
.

I
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must
admit that
even though
the
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course
was taught
intensively
for a
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good
period of four weeks, I felt like the time had passed
rather
quickly
since I enjoyed the
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course
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so
much. By the way, the best thing about the
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course
was that it
comprehensively
taught me about the arts of making
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some
Italian and oriental desserts
quickly
and
easily
.
Besides
, I enjoyed learning about the tricks of chopping meats
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so
nicely
.

Anyway, after finishing the cookery
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course
, I
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used
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some
of my cooking
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skills
to prepare
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some
delicious desserts for the birthday party of one of my close friends
in addition
to preparing
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some
of my
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favourite
dishes for my family.
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Before
ending here, I would
also
like to request you to introduce a short
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course
at your institute on preparing desserts by using
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
kinds of tropical fruits and vegetables.

Thank you once again for conducting such a useful course.

Yours
faithfully
,

Andre
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Dmitry
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS letter You recently did a short cookery course. The cookery school has asked for your feedback on this course. v. 2

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
205 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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