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Dear Sir or Madam, Last month I had a chance that I join your School's Cooking Class. It was given by Michelin Star Chef Mr. Gordon Ramsay. When I first hear the name of the chef I was so excited. Because I really interested with Michelin Chefs classes. I had too many classes by populer chefs and ofcourse it's improved my skill and vision. Due to my cooking classes experience I would like to take your attention to some organisation issues. I would have mentioned there was a too many trainee at school, nevertheless cooking area was not big enough. We learned many things from him, for instance, we learned how to make gnocchi, french soup and different cakes. But class was so crowded and noisy. Therefore sometimes we couldn't hear eachother and couldn't understand. Especially nowadays we have to be more carefull about social distance and hygiene issues because of the corona virus. However class joiners will not care about distance, at least you can keep less number of trainee for next cooking class. If I compare with the other cooking class organisations you have to develop your course organisations with these kind of feedbacks from us. Thank you for your time. Best Regards, Meray TUTLU

Dear Sir or Madam, Last month I had a chance that I This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :consolidatefuse
join
 your School's Cooking This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :coursetraining
Class
. It was This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :accorded
given
 by Michelin Star Chef Mr. Gordon Ramsay. “When” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
When
 I first
 hear the name of the chef I was This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
so
 excited. “Because” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Because
 I really
 interested with Michelin Chefs You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfamilycollectiondivisionschooldegreeleague
classes
. I had too This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a plethora ofa number ofnumerous
many
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfamilycollectiondivisionschooldegreeleague
classes
 by Possible spelling mistake found.popular
populer
 chefs and Possible spelling mistake found.of course
ofcourse
 it's This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :ameliorated
improved
 my This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :proficiency
skill
 and vision. Due to my cooking You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfamilycollectiondivisionschooldegreeleague
classes
 experience I would like to take your attention to This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
some
Possible spelling mistake. 'organisation' is British English.organization
organisation
 issues. I would have mentioned there was a too Possible agreement error. The noun trainee seems to be countable; consider using: "many trainees".many trainees
many trainee
 at school, nevertheless
 cooking area was not This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:hugeenormousgiganticvast
big
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:abundance
enough
. We learned This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a plethora ofa number ofnumerous
many
 things from him, for instance
, we learned how to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :createconstructmanufactureproduce
make
 gnocchi, french soup and This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:various
different
 cakes. This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
But
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :coursetraining
class
 was This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
so
 crowded and noisy. Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?Therefore,
Therefore
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :in some instances
sometimes
 we couldn't hear Possible spelling mistake found.each other
eachother
 and couldn't understand. Especially
 nowadays we This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:ought to
have to
 be more Possible spelling mistake found.carefulcarefullycare fullcareful l
carefull
 about social distance and hygiene issues This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
 of the The term "coronavirus" (= disease) is spelled as one word.coronavirus
corona virus
. Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?However,
However
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :coursetraining
class
 joiners will not care about distance, at least you can This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :retain
keep
 less number of trainee for next
 cooking This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :coursetraining
class
. “If” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
If
 I compare with the other cooking This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :coursetraining
class
Possible spelling mistake. 'organisations' is British English.organizations
organisations
 you This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:ought to
have to
 develop your course Possible spelling mistake. 'organisations' is British English.organizations
organisations
 with Did you mean "this kind" or "these kinds"?this kindthese kinds
these kind
 of feedbacks from us. Thank you for your time.

Best Regards, Possible spelling mistake found.MercyMerryMorayMerakMe ray
Meray
Possible spelling mistake found.TutuTUT LU
TUTLU