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You recently bought a piece of equipment for your kitchen but it did not work. You phoned the shop but no action was taken. Write a letter to the shop manager. In your letter . Describe the problem with the equipment . Explain what happened when you phoned the shop . Say what you would like the manager to do .

Dear Sir, I am writing this letter concerning the kettle I bought for my kitchen that did not work. I phoned the shop no action was taken on it. The kettle isnot bringing light as it surposed to be. The kettle is not boiling the water puts in it. When I on it from the switch that I plugged it on, it dose not put up light from the plug. When I phoned the shop, a lady picked the call and asked me what is wrong with the kettle. I told her that is not bringing light when I plug it and is not boiling the water that I put inside of it to boil. Also, I told her that the switch does not bring on light. She told me she will get back to me but i did not hear from her concerning it. I will like the manager to please look into it for me by changing it. Also, in will like the manager to always make sure that any equipment that is been bought in the shop should be tested before given it to customers. Thanks for your understanding. Your sincerely, Mrs John.
Dear Sir, I am writing this letter concerning the
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kettle
I
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bought
for my kitchen that did not work. I phoned the shop no action
was taken
on it. The
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kettle
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isnot
bringing
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light
as it
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surposed
to be. The
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kettle
is not boiling the water puts in it. When I on it from the switch that I plugged it on, it
Did you mean "doses"?
dose
not put up
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light
from the plug. When I phoned the shop, a lady picked the call and asked me what is
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wrong
with the
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kettle
. I
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told
her
that is
not bringing
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light
when I plug it and is not boiling the water that I put
This phrase is redundant. Consider using "inside".
inside of
it to boil.
Also
, I
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told
her that the switch does not bring on
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light
. She
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told
me she will
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get
back to me
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but
Is this the personal pronoun "I"? It is spelled uppercase.
i
did not hear from her concerning it. I will like the manager to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
please
look into it for me by changing it.
Also
, in will like the manager to always
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
sure that any equipment that
is been
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bought
in the shop should be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
tested
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before
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given
it to customers. Thanks for your understanding.
Did you mean "Yours"? (complimentary close)
Your
sincerely
, Mrs John.
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IELTS letter You recently bought a piece of equipment for your kitchen but it did not work. You phoned the shop but no action was taken. Write a letter to the shop manager. In your letter. Describe the problem with the equipment. Explain what happened when you phoned the shop. Say what you would like the manager to do.

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