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During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants. Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter-remind him when and where you meet-tell him what kind of job you are interested in -say why you think you would be suitable for the job

Dear Sir or Madam I am writing this to let you that I would like to work for your chain of restaurants. Let me introduce myself I am the one who met you on a flight while returning from Canada to India last week sitting next to your seat. As I am interested in service industry jobs and have completed hotel management. I think you may consider me. Last week on 23rd Jan we meet on a flight wherein we had a brief discussion about our profession and I got know that you own a chain of hotels. Additionally, you also suggested me to contact you for a possible job. Apart from this let me enlighten you that I am very much interested in the service industry jobs. I have experience for almost 5 years working as a front desk executive. According to my knowledge, customer service is the best industry where I fit in, as I love helping people. Moreover, I also hold a hotel management degree from a renowned university of Cambridge. Considering the education and relevant experience in the hotel industry, I think I would definitely satisfy your needs while working for your business. I hope to hear from you. Yours faithfully, Rob
Dear Sir or Madam

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me introduce myself I am the one who met you on a flight while returning from Canada to India last week sitting
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in service
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jobs and have completed
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management. I
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you may consider me.

Last week on 23rd Jan we
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meet
on a flight wherein we had a brief discussion about our profession and I
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know that you
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a chain of
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suggested me to contact you for a possible job.

Apart from this
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me enlighten you that I am
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much interested in the service
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industry
jobs. I have experience for almost 5 years working as a front desk executive. According to my knowledge, customer service is the best
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industry
where I fit in, as I
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love
helping
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people
.

Moreover
, I
also
hold a
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hotel
management degree from a renowned
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university of Cambridge
. Considering the education and relevant experience in the
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hotel
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industry
, I
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I would definitely satisfy your needs while working for your business.

I hope to hear from you.

Yours
faithfully
, Rob

IELTS letter During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants. Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter-remind him when and where you meet-tell him what kind of job you are interested in -say why you think you would be suitable for the job

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6.0
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