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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You recently attended a conference and you would like to give a presentation about the information you gained by attending the conference. Write a letter to your manager asking for permission to give a presentation. In your letter: describe what type of presentation you have in mind what topics it would cover and how long it would take who should participate in the presentation and where should it be conducted You do NOT need to write any address. You should write at least 150 words.

You recently attended a conference and you would like to give a presentation about the information you gained by attending the conference. Write a letter to your manager asking for permission to give a presentation. In your letter: describe what type of presentation you have in mind what topics it would cover and how long it would take who should participate in the presentation and where should it be conducted You do NOT need to write any address. 6jKj
Dear Mr Ya As you know, I attended a conference a week ago. I found that it is really informative and useful, consequently, I am writing to request for permission to give a presentation to our whole team. The presentation will be held as a sharing section similar to the one we usually have, but a bit longer. I am expecting it will be last for 20 to 30 minutes. I am going to firstly give a brief introduction on what is the purpose of the conference. Then I will emphasize on some key points that I found it is interesting. After that, I will illustrate with some examples, which I am preparing, to express the ideas on how to make use of those things I learnt. Last but not least, a question and answer section will be given. Hope both my teamates and I will have benefits through out this presentation. I look forward to your reply soon. Your Sincerely Sam Chan
Dear Mr Ya

As you know, I attended a conference a week ago. I found that it is
really
informative and useful,
consequently
, I am writing to request for permission to give a presentation to our whole team.

The presentation will
be held
as a sharing section similar to the one we
usually
have,
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but
a bit longer. I am expecting it will be last for 20 to 30 minutes. I am going to
firstly
give a brief introduction on what is the purpose of the conference. Then I will emphasize on
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
key points that I found it is interesting. After that, I will illustrate with
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
examples, which I am preparing, to express the
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ideas
on how to
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make
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use
of those things I
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learnt
. Last
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but
not least, a question and answer section will be
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given
.

Hope both my
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teamates
and I will have benefits
Did you mean "throughout"?
through out
this presentation. I look forward to your reply
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soon
.

Your
Sincerely


Sam Chan

IELTS letter You recently attended a conference and you would like to give a presentation about the information you gained by attending the conference. Write a letter to your manager asking for permission to give a presentation. In your letter: describe what type of presentation you have in mind what topics it would cover and how long it would take who should participate in the presentation and where should it be conducted You do NOT need to write any address.

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  American English
6 paragraphs
162 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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  • You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You recently attended a conference and you would like to give a presentation about the information you gained by attending the conference. Write a letter to your manager asking for permission to give a presentation. In your letter: describe what type of presentation you have in mind what topics it would cover and how long it would take who should participate in the presentation and where should it be conducted You do NOT need to write any address. You should write at least 150 words.