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You read this extract from an article in an English-language newspaper: I think most young people are selfish and only care about themselves. They need to get more involved in contributing to our communities and make positive decisions about wider issues when they are young. You decide to write a letter to the editor of the newspaper explaining your views on the points raised in the article and giving reasons for your opinions.

You read this extract from an article in an English-language newspaper: I think most young people are selfish and only care about themselves. They need to get more involved in contributing to our communities and make positive decisions about wider issues when they are young. You decide to write a letter to the editor of the newspaper explaining your views on the points raised in the article and giving reasons for your opinions. YR6pB
Dear the newspaper editor, In vour newest newspaper, I can see there is an article that said "I think most young people are selfish and only care about themselves. They need to get more involved in contributing to our communities and make positive decisions about wider issues when they are young. " The reason I write this letter to you is to explain my views on this point and the reasons for my opinion for the articles. First of all, I totally agree with that opinion. In my view, people nowadays, especially young people, are being more selfish and piggish. They only care about themselves and don't care about other people no matter what. I mean not everyone, but most young people are being selfish and think that it's cool to act like that. It seems to me that people always want the best things to happen to them because of cupid, and that's not a surprising reason at all because who doesn't want good things to happen to them? Furthermore, like the article has mentioned, I consider that people should get more involved in coming up with our communities and make effective decisions about greater issues when they are in their early ages. Social nowadays looks simple, but actually people are making it more difficult and complicated over time. Thus, individuals, especially young individuals, need to have more community connection and help others about bigger issues. For instance, they can join donation communities or help people with environmental protection. To all intents and purposes, selfishness doesn't help people to get better or be more productive, it just makes them more stubborn and lazier. Overall, selfishness is very unenthusiastic. It makes people become more piggish and idle day by day. Everyone should prepare themselves to make decisions with great issues and contributing ideas for communities.
Dear the newspaper editor,

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are selfish and
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only
care about themselves. They need to
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get
more involved in contributing to

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communities
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make
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positive
decisions about wider
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issues
when they are
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young
.
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The

reason I write this letter to you is to
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explain
my views on this point and the reasons for my

opinion for the articles.

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agree
with that opinion. In my view,
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nowadays,
especially
young

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people
, are being more selfish and piggish. They
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only
care about themselves and don't care

about other
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people
no matter what. I mean not everyone,
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but
most
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young
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people
are being

selfish and
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think
that it's cool to act like that. It seems to me that
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always want the best

things to happen to them
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because
of cupid, and that's not a surprising reason at all
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because


who doesn't want
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good
things to happen to them?

Furthermore
, like the article has mentioned, I consider that
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people
should
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get
more involved in

coming up with our
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communities
and
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make
effective decisions about greater
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issues
when they

are in their early ages. Social nowadays looks simple,
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but
actually
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people
are making it more

difficult and complicated over time.
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, individuals,
especially
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young
individuals, need to

have more
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community
connection and
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help
others about bigger
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issues
.
For instance
, they can

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join
donation
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communities
or
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help
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people
with environmental protection. To all intents and

purposes, selfishness doesn't
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help
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people
to
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get
better or be more productive, it
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just
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makes


them more stubborn and lazier.

Overall
, selfishness is
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very
unenthusiastic. It
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makes
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people
become more piggish and idle day

by day. Everyone should prepare themselves to
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make
decisions with great
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issues
and

contributing
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ideas
for
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communities
.
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IELTS letter You read this extract from an article in an English-language newspaper: I think most young people are selfish and only care about themselves. They need to get more involved in contributing to our communities and make positive decisions about wider issues when they are young. You decide to write a letter to the editor of the newspaper explaining your views on the points raised in the article and giving reasons for your opinions.

Letter
  American English
5 paragraphs
305 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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