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You play sports (e.g. football) for a local team. You recently heard that a player in your team is in a hospital. Write a letter to your teammate. In your letter say how you feel about the news ask about the treatment in the hospital suggest some ways of cheering him/her up

You play sports (e. g. football) for a local team. You recently heard that a player in your team is in a hospital. Write a letter to your teammate. In your letter say how you feel about the news ask about the treatment in the hospital suggest some ways of cheering him/her up L0nV
Dear Tom, Your sister Anna told me yesterday that you had had an injury and had been sent to the medical centre. I am really very upset about knowing that your leg is broken. I could not even imagine that the fall you had during the training session may cause a broken leg. In your reply to me please tell me how you feel now, how your treatment is organised in the hospital. I want to know everything to be able to understand the seriousness of your injury. Please note that I and our football team players (almost all of them) are going to visit you in the hospital. I should have kept it a secret, but I am not able to do it. Hence, get ready to meet the team and have some fun time together. Looking forward to receiving your message very soon with a detailed description of your leg wellbeing. Regards, Marine
Dear Tom,

Your sister Anna
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told
me yesterday that you had had an injury and had been
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sent
to the medical
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centre
. I am
really
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very
upset about knowing that your leg
is broken
. I could not even imagine that the fall you had during the training session may cause a broken leg.

In your reply to me
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please
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tell
me how you feel
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now
, how your treatment is
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organised
in the hospital. I want to know everything to be able to understand the seriousness of your injury.

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Please
note that I and our football team players (almost all of them) are going to visit you in the hospital. I should have
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kept
it a secret,
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but
I am not able to do it.
Hence
,
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get
ready to
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meet
the team and have
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some
fun time together.

Looking forward to receiving your message
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very
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soon
with a detailed description of your leg
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wellbeing
.

Regards,

Marine

IELTS letter You play sports (e. g. football) for a local team. You recently heard that a player in your team is in a hospital. Write a letter to your teammate. In your letter say how you feel about the news ask about the treatment in the hospital suggest some ways of cheering him/her up

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  American English
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154 words
6.0
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