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You paid a refundable deposit when you rented an apartment a year ago. You left the apartment last month in good condition, but the landlord won't return your deposit. Write a letter to the landlord. In your letter, • introduce yourself and say why you are writing • ask for the return of your deposit • inform the landlord of possible action if he/she does not agree to refund the amount

You paid a refundable deposit when you rented an apartment a year ago. You left the apartment last month in good condition, but the landlord won't return your deposit. Write a letter to the landlord. In your letter, • introduce yourself and say why you are writing • ask for the return of your deposit • inform the landlord of possible action if he/she does not agree to refund the amount qVLrw
Dear Mr Clive, Hope you and your family are doing well. My name is Louis Fabian, and I rented one of your apartments on Jenkins Avenue and lived there for a year before leaving the place last month. Anyway, the reason, for which, I am writing this letter to you is that even though I left the apartment in good condition, I didn’t receive my money, as per the leasing agreement, which was paid to you as a refundable deposit when I rented your apartment. Of course, not receiving the refundable deposit from you is frustrating enough for me, but even more frustrating is the fact that you didn’t care to specify any possible reasons as to why I should not get my deposit back. And since you failed to give me any reason whatsoever as to why I should not get my deposit back, it is only fair that you refund my money to me without any delay. But, if you are not willing to cooperate with me on this, I am afraid that I will have to take legal action against you to decide the matter in a court. Yours sincerely, Louis Fabian
Dear Mr Clive,

Hope you and your family are doing well. My name is Louis Fabian, and I rented one of your apartments on Jenkins Avenue and
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left
the apartment in
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good
condition, I didn’t receive my money, as per the leasing agreement, which
was paid
to you as a refundable
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deposit
when I rented your apartment.

Of course
, not receiving the refundable
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deposit
from you is frustrating
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enough
for me,
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but
even more frustrating is the fact that you didn’t care to specify any possible reasons as to why I should not
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get
my
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deposit
back.

And since you failed to give me any reason whatsoever as to why I should not
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get
my
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deposit
back, it is
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only
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fair
that you refund my money to me without any delay.
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But
, if you are not willing to cooperate with me on this, I am afraid that I will
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have to
take legal action against you to decide the matter in a court.

Yours
sincerely
,

Louis Fabian
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IELTS letter You paid a refundable deposit when you rented an apartment a year ago. You left the apartment last month in good condition, but the landlord won't return your deposit. Write a letter to the landlord. In your letter, • introduce yourself and say why you are writing • ask for the return of your deposit • inform the landlord of possible action if he/she does not agree to refund the amount

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6.5
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