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Your children go to a local school that requires volunteers to accompany school science trips. Write a letter to the school to apply to be a volunteer. In the letter: – Introduce yourself and give details of your children who attend the school – Explain why you are interested in the position – Talk about any relevant experience that you have with children

Your children go to a local school that requires volunteers to accompany school science trips. Write a letter to the school to apply to be a volunteer. In the letter: – Introduce yourself and give details of your children who attend the school – Explain why you are interested in the position – Talk about any relevant experience that you have with children 563gB
Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing this letter to apply for volunteering position to accompany school science trips. I hope you would consider me as volunteer at your school. I am 26-year-old, graduate with major in science. I feel proud to inform you that both of my children are currently studying in your esteemed institution. While my elder daughter is at her fifth standard, the younger one is on her third grade in your school. I have been notified by the school management that they are looking for volunteers to travel for the science trips. Since I spend most of my morning times idle, I am very keen to volunteer. Besides I am unemployed and have no idea to pursue my career. However, being volunteer at school would help me to pass time with more enthusiasm. Previously, I worked as science teacher at an elementary school. I had to quit my job in order to look after my family and was unable to pursue my career. I hope my work experience will outline that I will be able to connect with children easily. Considering the above reasons, I think you would find me suitable as volunteer. Looking forward to hearing from you, Yours faithfully, Nancy
Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing this letter to apply for volunteering position to accompany
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school
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science
trips. I hope you would consider me as
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volunteer
at your school.

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I
am 26-year-
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old
, graduate with major in
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science
.
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I
feel proud to inform you that both of my children are
currently
studying in your esteemed institution. While my elder daughter is at her fifth standard, the younger one is on her third grade in your school.

I have
been notified
by the
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school
management that they are looking for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
volunteers
to travel for the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
science
trips. Since I spend most of my morning times idle, I am
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
keen to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
volunteer
.
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Besides
I
am unemployed
and have no
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
idea
to pursue my career.
However
, being
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volunteer
at
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school
would
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help
me to pass time with more enthusiasm.

Previously, I worked as
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
science
teacher at an elementary
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
. I had to quit my job in order to look after my family and was unable to pursue my career. I hope my work experience will outline that I will be able to connect with children
easily
. Considering the above reasons, I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
you would find me suitable as volunteer.

Looking forward to hearing from you,

Yours
faithfully
,

Nancy
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IELTS letter Your children go to a local school that requires volunteers to accompany school science trips. Write a letter to the school to apply to be a volunteer. In the letter: – Introduce yourself and give details of your children who attend the school – Explain why you are interested in the position – Talk about any relevant experience that you have with children

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203 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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