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You paid a refundable deposit when you rented an apartment.You left the apartment in good condition but landlord wonot return your deposit #explain why your writing #ask for the return #inform the landlord of possible legal action.

You paid a refundable deposit when you rented an apartment. You left the apartment in good condition but landlord wonot return your deposit #explain why your writing #ask for the return #inform the landlord of possible legal action. 2eo6
Dear Jason, Hope you and your family doing well. I am John and I rented an apartment from you two years later as per lease I left an apartment two month ago. I am writing this letter to let you know about the refundable rent that I deposited when you gave that apartment to me and said you will refund me back whenever I will leave the apartment but in condition. Actually, I am waiting for that return from last two months, but you did not send me money in my account I thought maybe you forgot about that refund. so, I want to remind you. I really request you to return my money back as earliest as you can otherwise, I have to approach to legal authorities as I have all document that you gave me during lease, and I took some picture and video's when I left from apartment. we had good relation with each other so I really don't want to take this step so, pleased do not force me to do so. Your sincerely, John
Dear Jason,

Hope you and your family doing well. I am John and I rented an
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apartment
from you two years later as per lease I
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left
an
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apartment
two
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month
ago. I am writing this letter to
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let
you know about the refundable rent that I deposited when you gave that
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apartment
to me and said you will refund me back whenever I will
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leave
the
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apartment
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but
in condition.

Actually, I am waiting for that return from last two months,
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but
you did not
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send
me money in my account I
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thought
maybe you forgot about that refund.
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so
, I want to remind you.

I
really
request you to return my money back as
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earliest
as you can
otherwise
, I
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have to
approach to legal authorities as I have all document that you gave me during lease, and I took
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some
picture and
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video's
when I
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left
from
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apartment
.
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we
had
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good
relation with each other
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so
I
really
don't want to take this step
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so
,
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pleased
do not force me to do
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so
.

Did you mean "Yours"? (complimentary close)
Your
sincerely
,

John
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IELTS letter You paid a refundable deposit when you rented an apartment. You left the apartment in good condition but landlord wonot return your deposit #explain why your writing #ask for the return #inform the landlord of possible legal action.

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178 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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