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You ordered a new chequebook from your bank two weeks ago but you have received nothing. v.2

You ordered a new chequebook from your bank two weeks ago but you have received nothing. v. 2
Dear Sir or Madam, I ordered a new chequebook for a savings account that I maintain with your bank. It has been more than two weeks and I have not received it yet. I am writing to complain about this bad service and hoping you would rectify that. I have been maintaining the account in your branch for more than a decade and my account number is 7012845181. Generally, the service offered by the bank is praiseworthy, but I cannot say so this time. I placed a chequebook requisition on 14th January and I am still waiting to receive it. I have some payments to make including a payment to my pension fund and I cannot do so without the chequebook. It usually takes 4-5 working days to receive a new chequebook and I am not sure why it is taking so long this time. More surprisingly, when I called the bank the day before yesterday, I got no reliable response. I, therefore, request you to look into this issue and give me a probable date by which the chequebook would be delivered to my address. Furthermore, I would like to get appraised about the reasonable action that would be initiated from your end so as to reduce the possibility of reoccurrence of such a bad incident in the future. I am looking forward to hearing from you soon. Yours faithfully, Mehra Niraj
Dear Sir or Madam,

I ordered a new
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chequebook
for a savings account that I maintain with your bank. It has been more than two weeks and I have not received it
yet
. I am writing to complain about this
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bad
service and hoping you would rectify that.

I have been maintaining the account in your branch for more than a decade and my account number is 7012845181.
Generally
, the service offered by the bank is praiseworthy,
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but
I cannot say
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so
this time. I placed a
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chequebook
requisition on 14th
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
January and
I am
still
waiting to receive it. I have
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some
payments to
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make
including a payment to my pension fund and I cannot do
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so
without the
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chequebook
.

It
usually
takes 4-5 working days to receive a new
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
chequebook and
I am not sure why it is taking
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
long this time. More
surprisingly
, when I called the bank the day
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
yesterday, I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
got
no reliable response. I,
therefore
, request you to look into this issue and give me a probable date by which the
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chequebook
would
be delivered
to my address.

Furthermore
, I would like to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
appraised about the reasonable action that would
be initiated
from your
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
end
'So as to' expresses purpose and is used in formal texts. Consider using "to"
so as to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
the possibility of reoccurrence of such a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bad
incident in the future.

I am looking forward to hearing from you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
.

Yours
faithfully
,

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Mehra
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Niraj
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes

IELTS letter You ordered a new chequebook from your bank two weeks ago but you have received nothing. v. 2

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
232 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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