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You ordered a new chequebook from your bank two weeks ago but you have received nothing. v.3

You ordered a new chequebook from your bank two weeks ago but you have received nothing. v. 3
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to complain about the poor customer service that I have received from your bank lately. Despite giving a chequebook requisition almost fifteen days ago, I am yet to receive it. I have not got a proper response from the branch and I am hoping you would resolve it. Two weeks ago I ordered a chequebook by filling out the request form when I visited the bank in person. But neither have I got the chequebook nor have received any correspondence from the bank. I urgently need the chequebook as I have a few bills that I need to pay by cheque. I maintain a checking account with your Lockshire branch and my account number is CAA-2547847354. I am requesting a proper explanation for the delay and poor service. Please inform me how much longer I will have to wait for my chequebook. I would also like to know what action you are going to take regarding this bad service. I have been a customer of your bank for more than fifteen years and this is the first time I have had to complain. It is very disappointing. I look forward to hearing from you soon. Yours sincerely, Rocky Taylor
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to complain about the poor customer service that I have received from your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bank
lately. Despite giving a
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chequebook
requisition almost fifteen days ago, I am
yet
to receive it. I have not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
got
a proper response from the
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
branch and
I am hoping you would resolve it.

Two weeks ago I ordered a
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chequebook
by filling out the request form when I visited the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bank
in person.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
But
neither have I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
got
the
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chequebook
nor have received any correspondence from the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bank
. I
urgently
need the
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chequebook
as I have a few bills that I need to pay by
Possible spelling mistake. 'cheque' is British English.
cheque
. I maintain a checking account with your
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Lockshire
branch and my account number is CAA-2547847354.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
am requesting a proper explanation for the delay and poor service.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Please
inform me how much longer I will
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
wait for my
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chequebook
. I would
also
like to know what action you are going to take regarding this
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bad
service.

I have been a customer of your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bank
for more than fifteen years and this is the
first
time I have had to complain. It is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
disappointing.

I look forward to hearing from you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
.

Yours
sincerely
,

Rocky Taylor
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes
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IELTS letter You ordered a new chequebook from your bank two weeks ago but you have received nothing. v. 3

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
205 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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