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You have just spent a weekend at a friend’s house. When you returned home, you discovered you have left a coat containing some belongings in his house. v.3

You have just spent a weekend at a friend’s house. When you returned home, you discovered you have left a coat containing some belongings in his house. v. 3
Dear Steven, Thanks very much for a great weekend and I really enjoyed my time at your house. Please say hello to Paula whose hospitality is unforgettable. I hope you both will be able to come and stay with me sometime soon. Regrettably, I left my new coat at your house, I probably left it on the hooks in the guest room. Do you remember the black coat that I wore when I arrived at your house? It is a black tic classic fit car coat that goes down to mid-thigh level. It has a zippered inner bib, a quilted lining, three large buttons and side pockets on both sides. It's made of wool and nylon and I am sure you will detect it as soon as you look at it. I have left my wallet in the left pocket of the coat and the wallet contains my credit cards and some cash. I also put my Samsung Galaxy tab and an important document in the right pocket of it and this is really important for me. Laura will be in your town on Friday and I am hoping you would be able to give her a call so that she can collect it from your house. I have given her your phone number and she will be contacting you soon. Thanks again for a magnificent weekend and I hope to see you soon. Warm wishes, Haksoon Paik
Dear Steven,

Thanks
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very
much for a great weekend and I
really
enjoyed my time at your
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house
.
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Please
say hello to Paula whose hospitality is unforgettable. I hope you both will be able to
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come
and stay with me sometime
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soon
.

Regrettably
, I
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left
my new
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coat
at your
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house
, I
probably
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left
it on the hooks in the guest room. Do you remember the black
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coat
that I wore when I arrived at your
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house
? It is a black tic classic fit car
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coat
that goes down to mid-thigh level. It has a zippered inner bib, a quilted lining, three large buttons and side pockets on both sides.
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It
's made of wool and
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nylon and
I am sure you will detect it as
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soon
as you look at it.

I have
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left
my wallet in the
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left
pocket of the
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coat
and the wallet contains my credit cards and
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some
cash. I
also
put my Samsung
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Galaxy tab
and an
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important
document in the right pocket of it and this is
really
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important
for me. Laura will be in your town on
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Friday and
I am hoping you would be able to give her a call
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so
that she can collect it from your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
house
. I have
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given
her your phone
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number and
she will be contacting you
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soon
.

Thanks again for a magnificent weekend and I hope to
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see
you
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soon
.

Warm wishes,

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Haksoon
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Paik
1Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS letter You have just spent a weekend at a friend’s house. When you returned home, you discovered you have left a coat containing some belongings in his house. v. 3

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
237 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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