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You normally go shopping in the area where you live. However, you think some of the facilities for shoppers could be improved. Write a letter to your local newspaper. In your letter: say in general what you like about shopping in your area say what is wrong with the facilities suggest how they can be improved

You normally go shopping in the area where you live. However, you think some of the facilities for shoppers could be improved. Write a letter to your local newspaper. In your letter: say in general what you like about shopping in your area say what is wrong with the facilities suggest how they can be improved mJOr
Dear Sir / Madam I am reaching out to you in order to give a few advise for improvement ideas about the shopping center. The mall itself is a great place for both families and young people where everybody can find shops for their liking. There is also a good selection of restaurants in the food court, thus everyone can enjoy their favourite cuisine. Although the number of toilets are limited, they always appear to be clear and hygenic. I personally thank you for maintaining the facility in a good shape. However, there are some minor issues I noticed during my visits to the mall. First of all, the sound level of the speakers around the food court are too high. Especially the elderly people such as my father having a hard time hearing other people talking. Another one is having very bright advertisement screens all around the facilty. Thus, having flashing advertisements on the screens may cause serious health problems to sensitive individuals. I believe, you as the management have an operations office that you can control the volume of the speakers and perhaps you can dim the screens down from your control panels. Yours faithfully, Jake
Dear Sir / Madam

I am reaching out to you in order to give a few advise for improvement
ideas
about the shopping center.

The mall itself is a great place for both families and young
people
where everybody can find shops for their liking. There is
also
a
good
selection of restaurants in the food court,
thus
everyone can enjoy their
favourite
cuisine.

Although the number of toilets
are limited
, they always appear to be
clear
and
hygenic
. I
personally
thank you for maintaining the facility in a
good
shape.

However
, there are
some
minor issues I noticed during my visits to the mall.
First of all
, the sound level of the speakers around the food court are too high.
Especially
the elderly
people
such as my father having a
hard
time hearing other
people
talking.

Another one is having
very
bright advertisement screens all around the
facilty
.
Thus
, having flashing advertisements on the screens may cause serious health problems to sensitive individuals.

I believe, you as the management have an
operations
office that you can control the volume of the speakers and perhaps you can dim the screens down from your control panels.

Yours
faithfully
,

Jake
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IELTS letter You normally go shopping in the area where you live. However, you think some of the facilities for shoppers could be improved. Write a letter to your local newspaper. In your letter: say in general what you like about shopping in your area say what is wrong with the facilities suggest how they can be improved

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  American English
9 paragraphs
197 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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