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You would like to participate in a work-related seminar in another country. Write a letter to the person in charge of the seminar and ask for detailed information regarding the dates, program, accommodation and cost.

You would like to participate in a work-related seminar in another country. Write a letter to the person in charge of the seminar and ask for detailed information regarding the dates, program, accommodation and cost. GOyj
Dear DD, I writing to you because I am interested in a seminar which would be held in Australia by the firm on International Taxation and Tax treaties between India and Australia. It would be a great opportunity for if I would be able to participate in the team led by you, since my area of expertise is analysing tax agreements between countries. Request you to let me know when the seminar would be held and the detailed plan and itinerary of our visit to Australia. Further, do we have to arrange our own accommodation or it would be done by the firm? I was informed that the key-note speaker for the topic Multilateral Agreements is Ms. LIz. A few of my colleagues are also fascinated to attend hearing she would be giving a speech. Can the team members bring along a friend in that case? An important factor of the trip would be budget, hence, what would be the total expense including food? Eagerly awaiting your reply. Yours faithfully, Megha
Dear DD,

Did you mean "I'm writing", "I am writing", or "I was writing"?
I writing
to you
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because
I
am interested
in a seminar which would
be held
in Australia by the firm on International Taxation and Tax treaties between India and Australia. It would be a great opportunity for if I would be able to participate in the team led by you, since my area of expertise is
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analysing
tax agreements between countries.

Request you to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
let
me know when the seminar would
be held
and the detailed plan and itinerary of our visit to Australia.
Further
, do we
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
arrange our
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
accommodation or it would
be done
by the firm?

I
was informed
that the key-note speaker for the topic Multilateral Agreements is Ms.
Possible spelling mistake found.
LIz
. A few of my colleagues are
also
fascinated to attend hearing she would be giving a speech. Can the team members bring along a friend
in that case
?

An
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
factor of the trip would be budget,
hence
, what would be the total expense including food?

Eagerly
awaiting your reply.

Yours
faithfully
,

Possible spelling mistake found.
Megha

IELTS letter You would like to participate in a work-related seminar in another country. Write a letter to the person in charge of the seminar and ask for detailed information regarding the dates, program, accommodation and cost.

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170 words
6.0
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