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You need to seek admission in a short course. Write a letter to the admission officer. In your letter, you should tell: - what the course is - how your background knowledge is related to this - why this institute is importan

You need to seek admission in a short course. Write a letter to the admission officer. In your letter, you should tell: - what the course is - how your background knowledge is related to this - why this institute is importan yGP3r
Dear sir or madam, My name is Sandalu Sumudith and I am writing to obtain enrollment in a short-term course of 6 months in your university. I have been longing for this for about 1 year and now I am able to spare time to pursue the course. I should mention here that I am interested in doing an advanced diploma course in AR/VR development. Pursuing this course, I will not only be able to do impressive development but also be able to develop a new AR/VR game more efficiently for the company. Moreover, I did a Bachelor degree in computer science last year. SO, I have the necessary knowledge to do this diploma course. As I have been working in an IT company for 2 years as a game developer and I have much more experience regarding of Game development and designing. Doing this course from your prestigious university is vitally essential for me because I have heard a lot about the lectures and how they delivered the teaching methods. I am sure that I will gain knowledge more effective by completing the course at your university. I am looking forward to attending classes at your university. Your faithfully, Sandalu Sumudith.
Dear sir or madam,

My name is
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Sandalu
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Sumudith and
I am writing to obtain enrollment in a short-term
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course
of 6 months in your university. I have been longing for this for about 1 year and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
I am able to spare time to pursue the course.

I should mention here that I
am interested
in doing an advanced diploma
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course
in AR/VR development. Pursuing this
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course
, I will not
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only
be able to do impressive development
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but
also
be able to develop a new AR/VR game more
efficiently
for the
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company
.

Moreover
, I did a Bachelor degree in computer science last year.
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SO
, I have the necessary knowledge to do this diploma
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
. As I have been working in an IT
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
for 2 years as a game developer and I have much more experience regarding of Game development and designing.

Doing this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
from your prestigious university is
vitally
essential for me
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because
I have heard a lot about the lectures and how they delivered the teaching methods. I am sure that I will gain knowledge more effective by completing the
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course
at your university.

I am looking forward to attending classes at your university.

Did you mean "Yours"? (complimentary close)
Your
faithfully
,

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Sandalu
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Sumudith
.
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IELTS letter You need to seek admission in a short course. Write a letter to the admission officer. In your letter, you should tell: - what the course is - how your background knowledge is related to this - why this institute is importan

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
202 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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