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You need a equipment to do your job well explain: * what is the equipment *why do you need it *what you want manager do.

You need a equipment to do your job well explain: * what is the equipment *why do you need it *what you want manager do. dopE6
Dear manager, I am writing this letter with regard to install one more computer in my cabin in order to complete my work within given deadline. As you know, two months ago, I have been given a trainee to assist me. But he is very slow at work and keeps busy my system. Due to this, I am not being able to complete my work on time. It has been more than 2 months to me working overtime so that I could possibly complete my work in time, but still I am getting complaints from clients for delaying in work. I have already written an application to IT department in order to get a computer. But it doesn’t seem, I will get any reply from their side. Mr. Manager, I want you please get me a computer for my assistant. If company doesn’t arrange a computer, transfer him to another cabin. Hence, I request you to kindly look into this matter at the earliest. Looking forward your reply. Yours sincerely Ranny
Dear manager,

I am writing this letter with regard to install one more computer in my cabin in order to complete my
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work
within
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given
deadline.

As you know, two months ago, I have been
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
a trainee to assist me.
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But
he is
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very
slow at
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work
and
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keeps
busy my system. Due to this, I am not being able to complete my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
on time. It has been more than 2 months to me working overtime
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that I could
possibly
complete my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
in time,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
still
I am getting complaints from clients for delaying in work.

I have already written an application to IT department in order to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
a computer.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
But
it doesn’t seem, I will
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get
any reply from their side. Mr. Manager, I want you
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
please
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
me a computer for my assistant. If
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
doesn’t arrange a computer, transfer him to another cabin.

Hence
, I request you to kindly look into this matter at the earliest.

Looking forward your reply.

Yours
sincerely


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IELTS letter You need a equipment to do your job well explain: * what is the equipment *why do you need it *what you want manager do.

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  American English
8 paragraphs
170 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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