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You missed an appointment for an immigration interview recently because of circumstances out of your control. Write an apology letter to the immigration office.

You missed an appointment for an immigration interview recently because of circumstances out of your control. Write an apology letter to the immigration office. mW26q
Dear Sir or Madam, I am Mrs Shukurdjonova, a candidate for manager in your company. Please accept my sincere apologies for missing appointment on June 2th. As I mentioned my application I am currently sacked. I really need a job. However, a problem has risen. While coming meeting, a friend of mine phoned me and she said that she was feeling sick herself. I immediately rush in her house without thinking nothing. Owing to the fact that she lives alone. I brought her into hospital and she was admitted there. After that I stared at that time, unfortunately it was too late. I realize that this will be inconvenient to you, but very much hope that, given circumstances, you would be prepared to allow me to meet with you once again. I would like to emphasize that I remain extremely keen to work with you. I look forward to hearing a reply as soon as possible. Yours faithfully, Mrs Shukurdjonova.
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am Mrs
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Shukurdjonova
, a candidate for manager in your
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company
.
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Please
accept my sincere apologies for missing appointment on June
Please check the suffix, if this is an ordinal number.
2th
.
“As” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
As
I mentioned my application I am
currently
sacked. I
really
need a job.
However
, a problem has risen.

While coming meeting, a friend of mine phoned
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
me and
she said that she was feeling sick herself. I immediately rush in her
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
without thinking nothing. Owing to the fact that she
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lives
alone. I brought her into hospital and she
was admitted
there. After that I stared at that time, unfortunately it was too late.

I realize that this will be inconvenient to you,
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but
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
much hope that,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
circumstances, you would
be prepared
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
allow
me to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
with you once again.

I would like to emphasize that I remain
extremely
keen to work with you.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
look forward to hearing a reply as
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
as possible.

Yours
faithfully
,

Mrs
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Shukurdjonova
.

IELTS letter You missed an appointment for an immigration interview recently because of circumstances out of your control. Write an apology letter to the immigration office.

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
160 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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