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You live in an area where the local council has made some changes to regulations. You believe these changes are not good for the residents. v.1

You live in an area where the local council has made some changes to regulations. You believe these changes are not good for the residents. v. 1
I am Patrick Moon, a resident of Cabourne, Lincolnshire and a medical doctor by profession. I am writing to express my opposing views on the recent changes that the council have applied recently. I hope you would reconsider the imposed changes as they are against the people's interests. The decision to restrict public entry to the Central Lincolnshire Park is not acceptable to most of the residents. Many residents, with whom I have talked to in the past weeks, feel very negatively regarding the council's decision. Moreover, the council has decided to impose a weekly subscription fee for the public library access which I believe is not a good move considering a large number of student members. The 'Central Lincolnshire Park' is a place where local residents can freely walk, meet others, enjoy the scenic beauty of mother nature and play with children. It should be open to all. Moreover, the library access should be free to students while you can expect some membership fees from other readers. Please reconsider the changes that have been recently made as they are no way helping people which is one of the important responsibilities of the council. I would really appreciate if you analyse the changes and put people's interests above all. Yours faithfully, Patrick Moon
I am Patrick Moon, a
resident
of
Cabourne
,
Lincolnshire
and a medical doctor by profession. I am writing to express my opposing views on the recent
changes
that the council have applied recently.
I
hope you would reconsider the imposed
changes
as they are against the
people
's interests.

The decision to restrict public entry to the Central
Lincolnshire
Park is not acceptable to most of the
residents
.
Many
residents
, with whom I have talked to in the past weeks, feel
very
negatively
regarding the council's decision.
Moreover
, the council has decided to impose a weekly subscription fee for the public library access which I believe is not a
good
move
considering
a large number of
student members.

The 'Central
Lincolnshire
Park' is a place where local
residents
can
freely
walk,
meet
others, enjoy the scenic beauty of mother nature and play with children. It should be open to all.
Moreover
, the library access should be free to students while you can
expect
some
membership fees from other readers.
Please
reconsider the
changes
that have been recently made as they are no way helping
people
which is one of the
important
responsibilities of the council.

I would
really
appreciate if you
analyse
the
changes
and put
people
's interests
above all
.

Yours
faithfully
,

Patrick Moon
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS letter You live in an area where the local council has made some changes to regulations. You believe these changes are not good for the residents. v. 1

Letter
  American English
6 paragraphs
212 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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