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You live in an area where the local council has made some changes to regulations. You believe these changes are not good for the residents. v.1

You live in an area where the local council has made some changes to regulations. You believe these changes are not good for the residents. v. 1
I am Patrick Moon, a resident of Cabourne, Lincolnshire and a medical doctor by profession. I am writing to express my opposing views on the recent changes that the council have applied recently. I hope you would reconsider the imposed changes as they are against the people's interests. The decision to restrict public entry to the Central Lincolnshire Park is not acceptable to most of the residents. Many residents, with whom I have talked to in the past weeks, feel very negatively regarding the council's decision. Moreover, the council has decided to impose a weekly subscription fee for the public library access which I believe is not a good move considering a large number of student members. The 'Central Lincolnshire Park' is a place where local residents can freely walk, meet others, enjoy the scenic beauty of mother nature and play with children. It should be open to all. Moreover, the library access should be free to students while you can expect some membership fees from other readers. Please reconsider the changes that have been recently made as they are no way helping people which is one of the important responsibilities of the council. I would really appreciate if you analyse the changes and put people's interests above all. Yours faithfully, Patrick Moon
I am Patrick Moon, a
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resident
of
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Cabourne
,
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Lincolnshire
and a medical doctor by profession. I am writing to express my opposing views on the recent
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changes
that the council have applied recently.
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I
hope you would reconsider the imposed
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changes
as they are against the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
's interests.

The decision to restrict public entry to the Central
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Lincolnshire
Park is not acceptable to most of the
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residents
.
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Many
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residents
, with whom I have talked to in the past weeks, feel
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very
negatively
regarding the council's decision.
Moreover
, the council has decided to impose a weekly subscription fee for the public library access which I believe is not a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
move
considering
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a large number of
student members.

The 'Central
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Lincolnshire
Park' is a place where local
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residents
can
freely
walk,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
others, enjoy the scenic beauty of mother nature and play with children. It should be open to all.
Moreover
, the library access should be free to students while you can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
expect
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
membership fees from other readers.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Please
reconsider the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
changes
that have been recently made as they are no way helping
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
which is one of the
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important
responsibilities of the council.

I would
really
appreciate if you
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analyse
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
changes
and put
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
's interests
above all
.

Yours
faithfully
,

Patrick Moon
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS letter You live in an area where the local council has made some changes to regulations. You believe these changes are not good for the residents. v. 1

Letter
  American English
6 paragraphs
212 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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