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You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In the letter, • describe the situation • explain your problems and why it is difficult to work • say what kind of accommodation you would prefer

You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In the letter, • describe the situation • explain your problems and why it is difficult to work • say what kind of accommodation you would prefer rrmN
Dear Sir or Mam, I would like to start with thanking you for offering world class amenities in terms of campus accommodation. However, I am writing this letter, with the intent to express few of my concerns regarding my current room setup. To start with, my current setup is co-shared with another student, who has completely different lifestyle habits than mine. As a person who prefers a quite environment for studies, I often have to deal with loud music and regular house parties hosted by my roommate, impacting my academic space. These events usually last till dawn, not only impacting my study schedule but also my sleep cycle. As a result, I have been dealing with a lot of stress and sleep deprivation lately. The outcome of these parties continues to prevail with the task of tidying up the entire room all by myself, which usually chunks out a few hours of my productive time that could have been spent on completing assignments. Lastly, my roomie has a peculiar habit of borrowing my things without my prior consent, only to either misplace or return it in a very unfavorable state. Hence, it is my earnest request to you to aid my situation, either through means of providing me an alternate room set-up or by sanctioning an official warning to my roommate to re-evaluate his ways of co-existence. I shall be grateful to you for your kind and anticipated intervention in this matter. Regards Abhisek Ray
Dear Sir or Mam,

I would like to
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with thanking you for offering world
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class
amenities in terms of campus accommodation.
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, I am writing this letter, with the intent to express few of my concerns regarding my
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current
room setup.

To
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with, my
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current
setup is co-shared with another student, who has completely
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different
lifestyle habits than mine. As a person who prefers a
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quite environment
for studies, I
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have to
deal with loud music and regular
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house
parties hosted by my roommate, impacting my academic space. These
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events
usually
last till dawn, not
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only
impacting my study schedule
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but
also
my sleep cycle.
As a result
, I have been dealing with
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a lot of
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stress
and sleep deprivation lately. The outcome of these parties continues to prevail with the task of tidying up the entire room all by myself, which
usually
chunks out a few hours of my productive time that could have
been spent
on completing assignments.
Lastly
, my
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roomie
has a peculiar habit of borrowing my things without my prior consent,
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only
to either misplace or return it in a
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very
unfavorable state.

Hence
, it is my earnest request to you to aid my situation, either through means of providing me an alternate room set-up or by sanctioning an official warning to my roommate to re-evaluate his ways of co-existence. I shall be grateful to you for your kind and anticipated intervention in this matter.

Regards

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Abhisek
Ray

IELTS letter You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In the letter, • describe the situation • explain your problems and why it is difficult to work • say what kind of accommodation you would prefer

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