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Last weekend your friend celebrated her 50th birthday, but you couldn’t attend and forget to cancel. Write a letter to your cousin. In your letter Apologize for missing the birthday celebration Explain why you missed it and why you hadn’t let her know Describe how you will make it up to her.

Last weekend your friend celebrated her 50th birthday, but you couldn’t attend and forget to cancel. Write a letter to your cousin. In your letter Apologize for missing the birthday celebration Explain why you missed it and why you hadn’t let her know Describe how you will make it up to her. 5pop
Dear Divi, Hope this letter finds you in good health and spirits. I’m writing to apologize to you for not attending your 50th birthday celebration and being unable to cancel in advance. First of all, wish you a belated Happy Birthday. I’m extremely sorry for missing your birthday party and not calling you to cancel. Last month, I was extremely busy with my office work. I had to leave to overseas within a short intimation for a month to train the staff there. I was fully occupied with back to back meetings and moreover there is no feasibility of making international calls using my network because of that I couldn’t be able to call y and inform you about my cancellation. To fulfill this, I have planned a week vacation together to visit Maldives and I wanted to celebrate your Birthday there with a surprise party. Hope you will be able to make it up. Waiting to see you soon. Your friend Manasa
Dear
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Divi
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Hope this letter finds you in
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
health and spirits. I’m writing to apologize to you for not attending your 50th birthday celebration and being unable to cancel in advance.

This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".
First of all
, wish you a belated Happy Birthday. I’m
extremely
sorry for missing your birthday party and not calling you to cancel.

Last month, I was
extremely
busy with my office work. I had to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
leave
to overseas within a short intimation for a month to train the staff there. I was
fully
occupied with back to back meetings and
moreover
there is no feasibility of making international calls using my network
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of that I couldn’t be able to call y and inform you about my cancellation.

To fulfill this, I have planned a week vacation together to visit Maldives and I wanted to celebrate your Birthday there with a surprise party. Hope you will be able to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
it up.

Waiting to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
.

Your friend

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Manasa

IELTS letter Last weekend your friend celebrated her 50th birthday, but you couldn’t attend and forget to cancel. Write a letter to your cousin. In your letter Apologize for missing the birthday celebration Explain why you missed it and why you hadn’t let her know Describe how you will make it up to her.

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