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You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter describe the situation explain your problems and why it is difficult to work say what kind of accommodation you would prefer

You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter describe the situation explain your problems and why it is difficult to work say what kind of accommodation you would prefer mN2L
Dear Sir or Madam, I hope you are doing well during this unfortunate and unexpected pandemic era. I am a computer engineering student and I am staying in the student dormitories area, block B, room 210 along with my roommate Jack. Besides him, being a nice and kind person overall, sometimes some of his friends pay a visit, and this can end up with being quite loud, which can disrupt me from focusing on my studies. In addition to being loud they bring their snacks along or order it online from various webpages and afterwards leave them on the tables. As a summary, visiting friends of my flatmate are often loud and unhygienic which prevents me from focusing on my study materials and after they leave we lose time by cleaning the dirt and packages left behind. I would like to suggest a special room where dormitory residents can meet their friends and spend time together and avoid people from greeting and welcoming visitors in their own rooms. I am looking forward to your response. Have a very good day, Thank you, Can Telkenaroglu
Dear Sir or Madam,

I hope you are doing well during this unfortunate and unexpected pandemic era. I am a computer engineering
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student and
I am staying in the student dormitories area, block B, room 210 along with my roommate Jack.
Besides
him, being a nice and kind person
overall
,
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sometimes
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some
of his friends pay a visit, and this can
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end
up with being quite loud, which can disrupt me from focusing on my studies.
In addition
to being loud they bring their snacks along or order it online from various
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webpages
and afterwards
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leave
them on the tables. As a summary, visiting friends of my flatmate are
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often
loud and unhygienic which
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prevents
me from focusing on my study materials and after they
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leave
we lose time by cleaning the dirt and packages
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left
behind.

I would like to suggest a special room where dormitory residents can
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meet
their friends and spend time together and avoid
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people
from greeting and welcoming visitors in their
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own
rooms. I am looking forward to your response.

Have a
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very
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day,

Thank you,

Can
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Telkenaroglu

IELTS letter You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter describe the situation explain your problems and why it is difficult to work say what kind of accommodation you would prefer

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