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You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In the letter, • describe the situation • explain your problems and why it is difficult to work • say what kind of accommodation you would prefer

Dear Sir or Madam, My name is Segilola, a Computer Engineering student of this prestigious college. I am currently living in Apartment 8B in Moremi Hall which I share with another student. I am writing this letter to you to highlight the various problems that I am currently experiencing with my roommate which make studying difficult. Let me explain the situation to you. As a computer Engineering student, I write a lot of computer programs which I am only able to complete preferably in a quite environment. My roommate on the other hand is a music undergrad and an aspiring guitarist. He is constantly practicing on his guitar sometimes till late at night, and the constant noise makes it difficult for me to concentrate. Also, my roommate is a smoker and a heavy drinker. While I understand that it is his prerogative to indulge in smoking and drinking habits, I am however an asthmatic patient and thus for health reasons it is unsafe for me to live under these conditions. I would therefore appreciate if you could change my room. I would prefer to be paired with a student studying a similar course with mine and most importantly a student that does not smoke and drink. Thank you for your consideration and I look forward to a favorable response. Yours faithfully, Segilola
Dear Sir or Madam,

My name is
Segilola
, a Computer Engineering
student
of this prestigious college. I am
currently
living in Apartment 8B in
Moremi
Hall which I share with another
student
. I am writing this letter to you to highlight the various problems that I am
currently
experiencing with my roommate which
make
studying difficult.

Let
me
explain
the situation to you. As a computer Engineering
student
, I write
a lot of
computer programs which I am
only
able to complete
preferably
in a
quite
environment. My roommate
on the other hand
is a music undergrad and an aspiring guitarist. He is
constantly
practicing on his guitar
sometimes
till late at night, and the constant noise
makes
it difficult for me to concentrate.

Also
, my roommate is a smoker and a heavy drinker. While I understand that it is his prerogative to indulge in smoking and drinking habits, I am
however
an asthmatic patient and
thus
for health reasons it is unsafe for me to
live
under these conditions.

I would
therefore
appreciate if you could
change
my room. I would prefer to
be paired
with a
student
studying a similar course with mine and most
importantly
a
student
that does not smoke and drink.

Thank you for your consideration and I look forward to a favorable response.

Yours
faithfully
,

Segilola
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IELTS letter You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In the letter, • describe the situation • explain your problems and why it is difficult to work • say what kind of accommodation you would prefer

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  American English
8 paragraphs
221 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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