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You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter

You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter k8KW
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to let you know that I am extremely disappointed with the current accommodation due to the student I am sharing the room with. The problem started when my new old roommate had to move out and the new student started living in. I am not comfortable living with him as he is creating a wide range of problems in the room which is making it very difficult for me to work. Let me explain my situation in more detail. The guy keeps the room extremely untidy and he also keeps on smoking frequently. I have breathing issues and the smoke and dirt affects my medical condition. In addition, he plays very loud music during the night as a result of which I am neither able to work on my assignment nor I am able to sleep properly. Due to lack of sleep, I am unable to concentrate in the class which in return is hampering my results. It is my humble request to you to please shift me to another room if that is possible. The room can be single or double and I would prefer a roommate who is responsible and organized. I look forward to a positive response. Regards Manisha Das
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to
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let
you know that I am
extremely
disappointed with the
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current
accommodation due to the student I am sharing the
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with. The problem
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started
when my new
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old
roommate had to
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move
out and the new student
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started
living in. I am not comfortable living with him as he is creating a wide range of problems in the
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room
which is making it
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very
difficult for me to work.

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Let
me
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explain
my situation in more detail. The guy
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keeps
the
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room
extremely
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untidy and
he
also
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keeps
on smoking
frequently
. I have breathing issues and the smoke and dirt affects my medical condition.
In addition
, he plays
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very
loud music during the night
as a result
of which I am neither able to work on my assignment nor I am able to sleep
properly
. Due to lack of sleep, I am unable to concentrate in the
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class
which in return is hampering my results.

It is my humble request to you to
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please
shift me to another
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room
if
that is
possible. The
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room
can be single or double and I would prefer a roommate who is responsible and organized.

I look forward to a
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positive
response.

Regards

Manisha
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IELTS letter You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter

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  American English
6 paragraphs
209 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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