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You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In the letter, • describe the situation • explain your problems and why it is difficult to work • say what kind of accommodation you would prefer

You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In the letter, • describe the situation • explain your problems and why it is difficult to work • say what kind of accommodation you would prefer jGK8
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to inform you about my dissatisfaction with my current room and to request for another accommodation. My roommate and I currently reside in a sharing room with one common working area. This is inconvenient for us, as we have different preferences when it comes to studying methods. It is quite challenging to focus on my studies and tasks with one common area available for both our use. I prefer to recite things out loudly as it helps me memorize, but my roommate dislikes that approach and prefers to study quietly. Moreover, she hosts small gatherings in our room almost twice a week. I prefer not to do so as it can get very loud and noisy. I would be delighted if you could kindly transfer me to a private room for the semester to allow me to better focus on my studies and essays. If there are any additional costs required, I have no problem in paying them. I look forward to your soonest action. Yours faithfully, Mrs. J. Azem
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to inform you about my dissatisfaction with my
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current
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room
and to request for another accommodation.

My roommate and I
currently
reside in a sharing
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room
with one common working area. This is inconvenient for us, as we have
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different
preferences when it
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comes
to studying methods.

It is quite challenging
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to focus
on my studies and tasks with one common area available for both our
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use
. I prefer to recite things out
loudly
as it
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helps
me memorize,
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but
my roommate dislikes that approach and prefers to study
quietly
.
Moreover
, she hosts
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small
gatherings in our
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room
almost twice a week. I prefer not to do
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so
as it can
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get
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very
loud and noisy.

I would
be delighted
if you could kindly transfer me to a private
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
room
for the semester to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
allow
me to better focus on my studies and essays. If there are any additional costs required, I have no problem in paying them.

I look forward to your soonest action.

Yours
faithfully
,

Mrs. J.
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Azem
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IELTS letter You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In the letter, • describe the situation • explain your problems and why it is difficult to work • say what kind of accommodation you would prefer

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8 paragraphs
176 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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