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You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter describe the situation explain your problems and why it is difficult to work say what kind of accommodation you would prefer

Dear Sir, I am writing to express my dissatisfaction with my roommate. As you know we share a room. I cannot focus on my study while he is in the room. Let me explain furthermore actually my roommate wakes up late in the morning and plays loud music at midnight. I can't able to finish my sleep because of the disturbance of loud music. I have early morning classes and I cannot concentrate on my study. I need a quiet room and he is taking my stuff without asking me. He is not tidy and keeps things messy. I request you can give me a new roommate next semester. I have told my roommate to do parties in other places but he still doing it in the room and invites his friend at late-night parties. I cannot stay with him longer. I will be grateful if you could change me a single room. Yours faithfully, Jateenkumar Patel
Dear Sir,

I am writing to express my dissatisfaction with my
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roommate
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As
you know we share a room. I cannot focus on my study while he is in the room.

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Let
me
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explain
furthermore
actually my
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roommate
wakes up late in the morning and plays loud music at midnight. I can't able to finish my sleep
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because
of the disturbance of loud music. I have early morning classes and I cannot concentrate on my study.
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I
need a quiet
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room and
he is taking my stuff without asking me. He is not tidy and
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keeps
things messy.

I request you can give me a new
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roommate
next
semester. I have
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told
my
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roommate
to do parties in other places
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but
he
still
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doing
it in the room and invites his friend at late-night parties.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
cannot stay with him longer.

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I
will be grateful if you could
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change
me a single room.

Yours
faithfully
,

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Jateenkumar
Patel

IELTS letter You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter describe the situation explain your problems and why it is difficult to work say what kind of accommodation you would prefer

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
156 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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