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You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter describe the situation explain your problems and why it is difficult to work say what kind of accommodation you would prefer You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter describe the situation explain your problems and why it is difficult to work say what kind of accommodation you would prefer You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam, bax3
Dear Sir/Madam I am writing to let you know that the room which is allocated to me is not suitable and i face numerous difficulties due to my roommate. Moreover, he is not cooperative so it is nearly impossible for me to workout with him. My roommate is a night owl. He frequently stay up late night and play loud music due to which it is hard for me get proper sleep. Thereby, I feel restless next day and cannot concentrate towards my studies. Moreover, in next month, i am having final exams. I tried everything to settle down with him, but he is not ready to listen. Therefore, I request you to switch me to any other room with any other roommate. Additionally, it will be appreciated if my new roommate will be sincere enough to listen to others and work together accordingly. I will look forward to hear from you soon. Yours sincerely, Gurleen Jawandha
Dear Sir/Madam

I am writing to
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let
you know that the room which
is allocated
to me is not suitable and
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i
face numerous difficulties due to my
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roommate
.
Moreover
, he is not cooperative
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so
it is
nearly
impossible for me to workout with him.

My
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roommate
is a night owl. He
frequently
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stay
up late night and play loud music due to which it is
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hard
for me
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
proper sleep. Thereby, I feel restless
next
day and cannot concentrate towards my studies.
Moreover
, in
next
month,
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i
am having final exams. I tried everything to settle down with him,
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but
he is not ready to listen.

Therefore
, I request you to switch me to any other room with any other
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
roommate
.
Additionally
, it will
be appreciated
if my new
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
roommate
will be sincere
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enough
to listen to others and work together
accordingly
.

I will look forward
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to hear
from you
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soon
.

Yours
sincerely
,

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Gurleen
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Jawandha

IELTS letter You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter describe the situation explain your problems and why it is difficult to work say what kind of accommodation you would prefer You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

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156 words
6.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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