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You heard that the cafeteria at your work is planned for closure as it’s not in use. Write a letter to your manager and request to cancel this decision. In your letter - – State the reasons for it not being in use. – Why is it important to leave it open? – Suggest what to do with this place.

You heard that the cafeteria at your work is planned for closure as it’s not in use. Write a letter to your manager and request to cancel this decision. In your letter - – State the reasons for it not being in use. – Why is it important to leave it open? – Suggest what to do with this place. RkrgW
Dear Sir/Madam, I am Vinod kumar, Working as research scientist under you. I heard that you are thinking to close the canteen at our workplace. I am writing this letter to request you for not to close the canteen. I can suggest you the better idea, Rather than closing the cafe. It is not being used by our employees, because of the less number of varities the canteen is offering. The manager of the cafe is not maintaining it properly. In addition to that, the taste of the food is also not good. There are lots of rats and insects in the cafeteria because of poor maintenance. Instead of closing the cafe, if we can manage to get a better chef, who can cook international cuisines, it will increase the people flow. We also need to renovate the canteen and should change the maintenance staff. I feel, this is the best way to make the canteen better. Cafe is much important at workplace, because all the employees continuously work for 2 to 4 hours. They need some relaxation time to focus. If we have canteen, our employees can have some free time to sit and spend time. I will be waiting to hear from you. Yours faithfully, Vinod
Dear Sir/Madam, I am Vinod
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kumar
, Working as research scientist under you. I heard that you are thinking to close the canteen at our workplace. I am writing this letter to request you for not to close the canteen.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
can suggest you the better
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
idea
,
Rather
than closing the
'cafe' is an imported foreign expression, which originally has a diacritic. Consider using "café"
cafe
. It is not being
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
by our employees,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of the less number of
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varities
the canteen is offering. The manager of the
'cafe' is an imported foreign expression, which originally has a diacritic. Consider using "café"
cafe
is not maintaining it
properly
.
In addition
to that, the taste of the food is
also
not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
. There are lots of rats and insects in the cafeteria
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of poor maintenance.
Instead
of closing the
'cafe' is an imported foreign expression, which originally has a diacritic. Consider using "café"
cafe
, if we can manage to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
a better chef, who can cook international cuisines, it will increase the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
flow. We
also
need to renovate the canteen and should
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
the maintenance staff. I feel, this is the best way to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
the canteen better.
'Cafe' is an imported foreign expression, which originally has a diacritic. Consider using "café"
Cafe
is much
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
at workplace,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
all the employees
continuously
work for 2 to 4 hours. They need
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
relaxation time to focus. If we have canteen, our employees can have
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
free time to sit and spend time. I will be waiting to hear from you. Yours
faithfully
,
Please add a punctuation mark at the end of paragraph
Vinod
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IELTS letter You heard that the cafeteria at your work is planned for closure as it’s not in use. Write a letter to your manager and request to cancel this decision. In your letter - – State the reasons for it not being in use. – Why is it important to leave it open? – Suggest what to do with this place.

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  American English
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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